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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
happiness is only a word to me happiness is nothing to me happiness is something I once could feel happiness is no more I once was able to feel it I once had a meaning I once had a life I once was alive I once could feel the warmth of the sun I once could feel happiness Not anymore happiness is taken away from me happiness is no more happiness was taken by you You broke my heart You broke my soul you broke me you said you never would But you did you collected me then you shattered me you will pay I walk at night I watch you sleep I watch you learn But you will never learn That I’m always waiting Waiting to get you To give you pain The pain that hurt me. black beautiful eyes looking back at me showing me, no fear will show. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
okay when i was reading like ok ok this is pretty good intill you said "I walk at night I watch you sleep I watch you learn But you will never learn That I’m always waiting Waiting to get you To give you pain The pain that hurt me." And no-offence but i thought that was kind-of creepy. but then again u did post this on Dark poetry so its understandable. good job by the way |
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midnightdreamer Member
since 2008-02-03
Posts 309Roy,ut |
I know. i figured that out after i posted it. i didn't mean it to be that creepy. black beautiful eyes looking back at me showing me, no fear will show. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
lol its okay i bet you didnt mean to. lol its a good poem anyway lol ~Zach~ |
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Mystress May Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 296Taunton, MA |
There is nothing wrong with 'creepy'. It's you expressing yourself in a constructive way so that it doesn't build and come out in a negative way, later! I like the feel of this piece.... the only thing that disturbs me is the scattered rhythm. But that is one of my 'things'.... I enjoy rhythm. Good job, doll! Our scars are the foundation for what we have become |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
Wow! i love the creepy feelings. |
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