Dark Poetry #4 |
Rage |
misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
the darkness fills my once gentle heart fire surrounds me every way I turn evil embraces me tightly. the good shall fall victim to the wicked all the angelic turn devilish while the world changes dark. good souls are trapped within a sphere of hate never to be released again. no fear, just courage no light, just darkness. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
"no love, just rage no fear, just courage no light, just darkness. just us..." great ending, this is my favorite part...very sad, but it's a good poem either way. =) - River Love hurts as bad as it feels good. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There's my girl. And shaking my head. You are so much like me it's scary sometimes. This is a wonderful vent--but can ya stand just a little bit of motherly advice? I understand you like to write dark poetry, and probably prefer this forum, but try reading some of the wonderful poetry available to you here, and yes, let the poets know that you read and appreciated their offerings. It's only fair baby. love you |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Completely agree with River. The ending is superbly written. You have a great grasp of free verse, and a sad grasp on the reality of things. But remember: for every darkness, light. For every hatred, love. For every sad thought, one will find you that brings happiness. The world keeps it's balance, so don't forget to see both sides when you're looking. |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
truly spoken for both me and you Vagabon the Lost One |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Ya know? You write with a freedom that I can only dream about. I love it ^_^ there's a thousand places I'd like to be, but in your arms would be Heaven |
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Destinys_Fallen_Angel Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 75Boise Idaho |
wonderful poem...very expressive...i like it Yahoo messenger: destinys_Falen_Angel |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
.....Loved The Ending......... Hollow "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Oh wow. tHe ending stuck out extremelly well! It was brilliant! I loved it. The ending was the best part. It made the poem for me! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The ending was BRILLIANT! Loved it! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The ending was BRILLIANT! Loved it! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The ending was BRILLIANT! Loved it! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The ending was BRILLIANT! Loved it! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
The ending was BRILLIANT! Loved it! Kissa~ I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
outstanding. dark, very dark. as everyone has sed, the ending was amazing. no words cod do this justice. post more. darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Can relate! And the ending was perfect. Isis |
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