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Dark Poetry #4

Give Blood

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

0 posted 2007-02-03 03:08 PM

Give blood to the sea
so salt water can breathe.
The breach in winter heats.

Do we have to plead
to achieve a release?

Give blood to the dust
washing floorboards clean.
The breach sews shut defeat.

Do we have to bleed
to achieve some peace?

Give blood to the love
dying red the clouds above.
The breach pulses in sympathy.

Do we have to hurt
to achieve the end?

I am my only enemy.
I'm saving blood for me
to bleed...

"They will plunder all your dreams
And take away your teddy bear... "
gODHEAD

Idontmindyouundermyskin
Junior Member

since 2007-01-29

Posts 32

1 posted 2007-02-10 02:23 AM

I didn't get some of your metaphors,

"Give blood to the sea
so salt water can breathe.
The breach in winter heats."

and...

"Give blood to the dust
washing floorboards clean.
The breach sews shut defeat."

Other than that a very good wirte. Short and simple but full of meaning of self empowerment as someone overcomes a difficult situation.

I liked it.

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