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arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

0 posted 2006-12-12 02:09 PM

Listening

Laughter in the distant sunlight,
Where I lay is dark as night.

Candles at my foot and head,
I am the newly waiting dead.

Footfalls; make floor boards creak,
You wait:sob;and then retreat

I listen for a silent footfall,
I am listening for a silent call.

Mourners:You will not hear or see,
These shadows:they come for me.

They are not here to summon you.
Not yet,not yet;not yet:

But they will come!

Arthur

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2006-12-12 02:46 PM

Quite sad Michael..the seemingly endless wait in this piece.
You captured the feeling very well.

Nancy.

Sing in me muse...
and through me tell the story~

Draugluin
Junior Member

since 2006-12-08

Posts 48
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2006-12-12 03:19 PM

Stiringly lonely, self-indulgent, I liked it.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-12-13 12:51 PM

i loved this it was amazing keep writing and i will keep reading

hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

secret_truth_lies
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 74

4 posted 2006-12-25 10:27 AM

happy holdiay to all, so I thought this was quite sad. Even to read on Christmas Day. But it was very well written. I hope to see more from you very soon. Thanks for sharing with us.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2006-12-25 12:14 PM

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

6 posted 2006-12-25 02:02 PM

    Much like Poe.... dark and forboding.. yet compelling with strong imagery. Very good write.

            MoonShadow

sleeping_beauty23
Junior Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 12
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2006-12-26 10:55 PM

i like the constrast between sunlight/laughter and darkness/death - makes for a very complex read

Russell8624
Member

since 2006-11-28

Posts 99
Minnesota

8 posted 2006-12-27 03:00 AM

i want the thirty seconds it took to read that back

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

9 posted 2006-12-28 01:19 PM

Russel. Thats so mean. So your attitude carries over to this forum to

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