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Mr. Omniscient
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0 posted 2006-10-31 06:20 PM



The Attack

Leaving this school immediately is my recommendation…
You must be part of an alien invasion because
You being here is no compensation...
All you send is much humiliation.
Can’t you see the dispensations,
You’re the cause of everyone’s negative sensation.
And “No…” these aren’t false imputations or allegations,
We need an alleviation of you…

This is your profession; it’s just what you do.
How many schools have you conquered and ruined…? Three? Two?
Do you have a list you follow with your crew?
I’m sorry but I have to put an end to your queue.



[This message has been edited by Mr. Omniscient (11-01-2006 05:17 PM).]

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1 posted 2006-11-01 12:16 PM


very gripping, good... i'm not sure i understood who you were talking to though... but it was good anyway.
hunnie

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2 posted 2006-11-01 07:01 AM


Nobody in particular.
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