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Dark Poetry #4

split feelings

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2006-10-19 11:59 PM

i acually thought you were gone,
but it just like you to come back again,
and save me from this hell i'm in,

i acually thought you hated me now,
thought were reeling through my head,
did i do anything wrong, was it something i said?

i hate being this desprate for you,
and hurt when you blow me off once more,
you kill me slowly the pain i can't ignore,

i don't know how to deal with the hurt,
of you forgetting me during my depression,
but it's plain to see, you're my obsession.

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2006-10-20 09:27 AM

I really like this poem. I know what youre going through. I hope you two figure it out and fix anything that you two need to fix. I hope to see more from you in the future. Thanks for sharing.
Courtney

patience_iago
Member

since 2006-08-30

Posts 54

2 posted 2006-10-22 03:07 PM

I feel like this could have been worded better, and the rhyming was all crazy, sometimes it was there, and other times it wasnt. I think its a great idea behind it, and I really felt what you wanted to say.

shatteredsilver
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since 2005-03-31

Posts 63
middle of nowhere