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eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

0 posted 2003-11-20 10:37 PM

Exposure of the most indecent kind
I don’t want these people to find.
My soul feels sick,
So sick if I spoke to you, you’d be infected,
Imperfect perfections deceive us-
Relieve us,
Conceive us.
Believe me when I say,
This soul is broken today.

When we laugh indoors
The blissful tones bounce off
The walls like a mosaic
Shattered into a thousand pieces.

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

1 posted 2003-11-20 10:40 PM

Believe me when I say,
This soul is broken today.

Oh wow! This poem moved me. I love it, I love it, I love it, I love it. Amazing write, you've outdone yourself. Today, we are all broken..

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

2 posted 2003-11-20 11:00 PM

thanks man, i am getting back my writing! finally...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

KuruShio
Member

since 2003-11-18

Posts 110

3 posted 2003-11-20 11:10 PM

I like.

Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless.
KuruShio (DeadlyBob)

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

4 posted 2003-11-21 11:59 AM

Exposure of the most indecent kind
I don’t want these people to find

When we laugh indoors
The blissful tones bounce off

The walls like a mosaic
Shattered into a thousand pieces.

eor, it's good to read you on a regular basis again. These lines continued to draw me in while I read a few times. The content of your writing is becoming more self -confident. Like, I'm not going to take it anymore. Your style is and was always outstanding. Nice.

poe

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

5 posted 2003-11-21 12:53 PM

thanks poe, i am starting to get my pen back, i just hope it lasts...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

6 posted 2003-11-21 07:53 PM

A true pen never dies, your talent shall last until the day you leave this place. You are back and stronger than ever

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

7 posted 2003-11-21 08:14 PM

And in the shattered shards, discover the truth.

CB 8)

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

8 posted 2003-11-22 10:12 PM

I read this once before but my comp wouldnt let me post. Nice write. Its to the point and pretty much exact.

GIS

Closed will remain closed until opened.

[I try hard to have a father, but instead I had a dad...]- Kurt Cobain

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2003-11-22 11:14 PM

Hey Matt,

you know THIS right here I can connect with soo much, you have no idea . . this is one of your best , to me

Imperfect perfections deceive us-

EXACTLY
we need to see with better vision
nice write
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (11-22-2003 11:16 PM).]

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

10 posted 2003-11-23 10:30 PM

thanks sue, i liked that line myslef!

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

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