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Khatharsis
Junior Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 42

0 posted 2006-10-10 11:47 AM

Your Hand in Mind
Chills rushing through me wit the touch of your kiss
As I wish this never end, in this descending rain of bliss…
Our embrace sparked the shelter between our arms
The fire lights our souls as stars shine through our hearts…
One with the God, Indra, we stand arm in arm, forever
Stirring into one as we live through the eyes of each other…
The rain pores onto our surface but soaked in our smiles
My admiration can’t be hidden, being cloaked through miles…
…As you stand here, Your Hand in Mine…

…Waking to the stars, its you I breathe in consistence
Inside it feels the same, but it makes me seethe in existence…
Living behind blue eyes, in skies above an fields below
I close my lids, but my eyes are open in the storms long ago…
Listen to every night’s storm, lightning recoils us back…
…back to the moment of a memorial we built as our plaque…
Closing my thoughts and back to the dream of a reality
As the clouds begin to roar and taste the droplets of mortality…
…As I stand here… with Your Hand in Mind/mine

Moonkist
Member

since 2006-09-29

Posts 197
Pennsylvania

1 posted 2006-10-10 02:27 PM

Wow, Khatharsis!
I'm speechless...

~Moonkist~

Freedom Now

Khatharsis
Junior Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 42

2 posted 2006-10-15 12:16 PM

thats a million for that. I got the exact same response for the girl it was for.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

3 posted 2006-10-15 03:52 PM

This poem shares a image of romantic love (a love that is yet to see the light of reality). It is very sweet and untouched with the negativity of this world. Good write.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

Khatharsis
Junior Member

since 2006-05-21

Posts 42

4 posted 2006-10-15 03:57 PM

actually its more so that I miss my girl back home, and that its just been too long since i last seen her and everytime dream of her... i forget shes not around. Im traped in the memory of the last time I saw her. Like waking up in denial. But i can see what ya mean.

Very much appreciated, with the returned feed.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2006-10-15 05:11 PM

this was absolutly wonderful. it had very strong wording loved it.
…As I stand here… with Your Hand in Mind/mine.
that ended it very well. hope to read more soon.
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

6 posted 2006-10-15 11:26 PM

"I close my lids, but my eyes are open in the storms long ago… "

That line was my favorite, i have to agree with everyone else that has replied, this was good. Well done.

"My soul is adrift in oceans of madness
Repairing the rift that you have created"~ Disturbed

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

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