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Dark Poetry #4

The Time Of The Sadness.

TheSaddess
New Member

since 2006-09-29

Posts 1

0 posted 2006-09-29 08:57 PM

This is my first poem ever. Im not sure if its any good. But it is truly coming from de depest sorrow in me.

The Time Of The Sadness.
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When the "world" becomes darker than dark.
Then you know, sadness has come for your heart.
In this particular time, you may only want to hide.
All that used to shine, is now gone in the blink of an eye.

How did the time stop so sudden. And left me here in nothing.
I thought it was a mistake, but it is only me that seems to shake.
I guess my only hope is to wait. For this time to slide away.
The end must be very near, i see only the darkness here.

Or maybe it is only my fear, please time will you make it disappear.

~The Poem Of Sadness

JenniferMaxwell

Member Elite

since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

1 posted 2006-09-29 09:18 PM

Really pretty good for a first poem! I think you made a very valid point, the sadness will disappear in time, if you want it to. Keep on writing!

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-09-30 01:37 AM

Hi TheSaddess,

I must admit I was stunned at how good this was for a first poem. Mine turned out horrible so now I'm a little jealous you did so well with yours... lol

WElcome to passions dark forum! Glad you could join us here

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

3 posted 2006-09-30 05:10 PM

wow i thought this was a great first poem! i can also relate to it, i love poems i can relate to, Great Job keep writing~!

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

4 posted 2006-09-30 09:42 PM

Interesting. (The good way)

-Juju

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Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

5 posted 2006-09-30 10:39 PM

First...

Welcome to Passions!
It's always great to have knew poets.

Really loved your poem!!! Looks like you have lots of potential. I'll be looking for more of your work.

Hugs and Hershey bars for you!!!

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