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Dark Poetry #4

Erring on Me

sgreybe
Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2006-09-14 06:54 AM

ERRING ON ME:

My name and my place, the hope of my days
What does myself mean to me?
Strength and love divided and flows free, yet restricted
The time of erring reflected in me
Scrutinised, taken apart, rejected
The course of my life forever determined
Who I may be and where I may stand
By hateful, spiteful people who don't understand

Sylvia 17/08/06

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-09-18 02:03 PM

Hi sgreybe,

I'm not sure I understand the whole poem together but I liked the parts I felt that I understood. The first half, to me, was kind of a trying to find myself sort of feel and the last half was lashing at the world for the judgement cast. I kind of liked it in the seperate sort of form. It does come together in the end, which makes it even better. Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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lanaia74
Member

since 2006-08-25

Posts 67

2 posted 2006-09-20 06:52 AM

I loved it! Totally AWESOME!

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