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the sixth commandment |
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burntsiena Junior Member
since 2006-08-10
Posts 34Rhode Island |
How can you say you’re right? Taking a life for a life More have suffered pain and strife Since that fateful day For those who died I often pray For those who lived Many responsibilities lay Not to join hate’s fray Lest the sky turn gray While kids are out to play Shrapnel tears through skin More crushed to death because Our country also lives in sin Innocent lives memorialized Yet even more are lost Across the world As wars are fought End the strife Snap the vicious cycle Their name can now be Bought and sold On DVD Those lives weren’t free Always believing what we’re told Shame on you for using their name It’s war for life that you‘re losing, it’s not a game Say I have no backbone, now who’s lame? We could’ve shown And led the world Away from hate Be the better man Now, is it too late? We must make it all right Reciprocate - only breeds hate Stop using their name in vain It only serves to increase the pain Look outside the frame The terror you will never tame Your hand also bears the mark of Cain How can killing more be sane? God help us now It’s gone too far I wanna runaway in my car But I’m outta gas A passive American Tempted by the bar Anger Melancholy Disgust Empathy Every innocent life lost On every continent Deserves remembrance Not a march of hate in cadence Armenia to America The Middle East not the least Columbia to every continent We’re all just as important And terror is wrong So let’s stop going along Without any change The world is not a firing range All violence causes pain |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
This was amazingly emotional. A fantastic read, and brutally honest. |
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Philmont Member
since 2004-01-10
Posts 61 |
Emotional, yes. Will it be taken seriously by those in power? No. Face it, kid, it's the people who are in power that play the game you rail against and they play it so you can have the freedom and the material posessions you enjoy for reduced cost. |
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burntsiena Junior Member
since 2006-08-10
Posts 34Rhode Island |
I appreciate those of you who stuck through this one and its impassioned tone. Materialism is rampant in our modern society and I hoped that the bought and sold aspect of the poem would draw attention to this dimension of the culture we live in. I will withhold further comment to Philmont because I do not wish to promote or dispute politics on this website - as it is against the aims of this website. I just felt it necessary to voice my own feelings on a moment in time. My goal is not to present a message to those in power but instead express, as best as I can, emotions in the form of a poem. In doing so I hoped to get comments based on the poems ability to do so or failure to do so or cliche nature of the poem, etc. |
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