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Dark Poetry #4

YOU SEE THIS?

droppinginsideout
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 54
TENN

0 posted 2006-08-04 06:23 AM

are You blind?
can You not see this,
the way im slipping away,
farther than planned.
Wait, did i plan to go down?
did i create this quikness im drowning in?
my minds trying so hard as
im crying for a new card to pull,
yet it pulls me down faster.
so, are You blind?
can i not be helped?
what'd i do to deserve this?
Whatd, You say? It's what didnt i do?
i guess i rolled my feelings up too many times,
now it's catching up.
guess i'm blind.
too bad i didnt realize it
before i was this deep.

And when i figure to let my friends help
more things turn to problems.
get put in my way just enough,
it collides with everything.
thats how it pulls me
GETs IN MY WAY!
i cant help it anymore
im on no ones shoulders now.

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

1 posted 2006-08-06 11:54 AM

I liked it. Its quite sad in a way and yet defiant. i loved these lines

"i cant help it anymore
im on no ones shoulders now."

I can relate to them. Keep up the good work.

Since this is the first time ive seen you, allow me to welcome you to PIPtalk!

A sign in the wind
ringed by the falling petals
Alone
Amongst black roses

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