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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys 
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It came to me like a dream, this charged commission, In which way I should go, where is my trough, It felt like I had wings carrying me up to my fate, I reached the top and my wings fell off, Dropping me down to an all too familiar place, I knew the smell, but could not place myself. As if the world turned me upside out, inside down Confused, wasn't I just here- inconvenience, This maze of nonsense, trying to make sense Surrounded by a wall of mime like walls, Closing in on my life bubble, Fill my can with pepper, Line my thoughts with salt, I was always too bland for you, Cardboard, line-less paper, Capers sent me into insanity, And where do I go from here, the cow is not appeased. The light shines all but this way but darkness avoids me, Gray surrounds, eyes tied open, brain wired shut, Trapped in a bed of lies am I, About all the misfortunate, Miss. Forgotten, And the blood spilled on the ground was so thick Like syrup on a cold day. I can feel the confusion Rolling off my back like water mixing with oil, The feathers of the duck are not so slick. The leaves are so foreign to me, Dip my head beneath the water, Searching for my prey- I have lost it through the bubbling waters, From my mouth the air escapes, I see my silken body float beneath the surface, A mirror upon my life, and thus Goes the hands of time, I have the wounds to prove, The clock strikes with her hands. "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
Hey man, haven't seen anything by you on here for a long time. Great read, very interesting. I'll have to read it a few times. Nice write. |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Hey eor, great come back. The entire write is outstanding, but these first lines kept calling me back for another read. "It came to me like a dream, this charged commission, In which way I should go, where is my trough, It felt like I had wings carrying me up to my fate, I reached the top and my wings fell off, Dropping me down to an all too familiar place, I knew the smell, but could not place myself".... I reached the top and my wings fell off. Great return eor. Good to read you again man. poe poe If nothing is something |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
eor I pray you find peace...you deserve nothing less..no one deserves anyhing less. Sending a hug.  Love ya kiddo, Terri~  |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thank you guys for reading my poem, i really havent been writing too much latley, been so busy, but i am gonna try to post more... "So what befalls the flawless? |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
love this eor =)...somewhat gruesome on some lines *cringes?* lol, great job i loved this line "Gray surrounds, eyes tied open, brain wired shut," nice description, and "I see my silken body float beneath the surface," is just chilling...oh my gosh. catch ya laters =) - River Love hurts as bad as it feels good. |
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beckers716 Junior Member
since 2003-11-16
Posts 39Ohio |
Excellent writing, I love your style. I hope to be reading more from you! |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Hey man, this put me on a hook. "And where do I go from here, the cow is not appeased. The light shines all but this way but darkness avoids me, Gray surrounds, eyes tied open, brain wired shut, Trapped in a bed of lies am I," And as someone else said, written with thorough greatness. Nice to see you back. GIS All that is great once was small. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
thanks grenny, you know i always appreciate the time taken, poe, terri, and mad hatter-sorry i didnt take the time to idivualy thank you before i was kinda in a hurry, but you know it is always appreciated river-thanks for reading, this was not really ment to be grusome though, just how i saw mslef, kind of like looking in the mirror sometimes and not really see youreself there beckers-thakns for the read, you will def be deeong more of me soon "So what befalls the flawless? |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Look what I found..... |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
this was posted during a time when too many projects were pulling me thin, and thus i missed it first go-round. thanks, mp, for re-vamping this! and eor, this was the first of your writes that mine eyes bloodshotted. a truely remarkable piece, and one i relate to well. great pen/man/ship poem... i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
wow poe this was pulled from almost a year a go, nice find my friend,  Awake through motion with curiosity to curtain your first move |
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