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Cursed child |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well, sorry, I didn't mean to make this quite that long and I hoped it could be better, but i've got what i've got and i hope ya'll have some suggestions? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The sound of your voices resonating in my head Like rain upon the thatched roof above my bed I listen to the murmur of your voices until I feel the sun upon my skin Letting me know you’ve been at it all night once again… While I bask in what I know as the warmth of day I ponder last night and the nights before other nights Wondering, questioning, could this be my fault Could it be you always argue because of me? How I wish that it wasn’t true but I know that it is Cause I’m helpless to help when I want to help Unable to learn what you need me to learn A burden upon your head, your cursed child that should’ve been dead Yet, mother, you kept me on tried to make me strong When father didn’t care, you held me close, shielding me, protecting me Never letting him have his way, thinking that I could survive That I’d be able to see in the light of day, that it would just take time Ignoring the truth when you should’ve opened your eyes to see Your only child, that’s me, was a cursed child, a child without hope One who couldn’t survive without your love, your care, your hoping Cause when the village wanted me dead you stood up and shook your head And ignored my father when he had the “Demon” drink in his head Yet I can hear, with me, the village will ignore that you exist My father will abuse and bruise you, until you give in Until you give up this child with the “evilness” inside Me, that child, that cursed wretch, who’ll be… blind… from birth to death… @-->--- |
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Digital_Hell Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202Amidst black roses |
An excellent write, very good use of imagery. I can relate to this so well, it describes exactly how i feel. I am the black sheep in my family, the outcast. Reading this brought a lumb to my throat and put me on the verge of tears. I know the emotions behind this poem and what it feels like. I cant wait to see more of your work hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey Digital_hell, Thanks so much for posting a reply, it was much appreciated... Nice to know there's another black sheep out there who can relate to me in some way, although, being a black sheep can be rather fun! baaaahhh lolz... thanks abunch for posting though, it was nice of you  @-->--- |
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Venus1974 Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 79Tennessee, USA |
I guess I have to say BAAAA too bc I am yet another of the black sheep...loved the poem...although very sad I can truly relate to it Thanx for sharing Peace and happiness to us all, Venus |
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the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK |
Amazing write, stargal. I really felt for that poor, desolate child; and I could really relate to certain themes there too. You're an extremely talented poet, and you have a real gift for translating raw emotion into words. |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
Took me a while to find your poem, sorry about that, just learning how to maneuver through the system.  Your poem really touched my heart. You've expressed so well how it feels to be an unwanted child, the black sheep in a dysfunctional family and used some very captivating imagery in doing so. I look forward to reading more of your poetry in the Dark Forum. And thank you so much for the warm welcome and kind comment on my poem. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi JenniferMaxwell, No, thank you for reminding me I had this poem in here! I’d forgotten I even wrote something for dark, so, as you can imagine, when I saw it, it was a bit of a surprise… Btw- if you haven’t already figured it out, the bar of stuff beside the date of when you post something holds a piece of paper with a glass, it helps to find peoples poems. Thanks for taking the time to locate my stuff and once again welcome! "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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