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Internalexile
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 38
UK

0 posted 2006-06-20 05:09 PM

A flock of gulls screech above the door,
They screech far louder than the seas roar,
I see them now with eyes old with eyes wise,
I hear them louder with ears sick of lies.

I am here against my will,
I’ve had my day I’m over the hill,
So they put me here to rot,
I gave them it all I gave them the lot!

I gave them everything I ever had,
But are they grateful are they glad,
No they’re not, of course, of course,
They put me here without remorse.

So I sit amongst the dead and dieing,
So much now I feel like crying,
For this is the prelude to the crypt,
This is where you go when youth has slipped.

So now I take my final stand,
Something that will make my life grand,
I’ve changed my will they won’t get a penny,
I’ve got a lot and they haven’t got any!

So now it’s my turn to move on,
My bodies crippled my mind is gone,
Soon in the ground my body shall sleep,
I cry, for my family will not weep.

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

1 posted 2006-06-20 08:45 PM

I’m guessing you and your family don’t get along, that’s to bad. But your poem is great.

*Leah

The love you cant have lasts the longest, feels the strongest, and hurts the most

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

2 posted 2006-06-21 12:14 PM

How sad, but also very true. We live in such a disposable society, that people don't think twice about discarding what is no longer useful to them. Sadly, even people have seemed to become less important than convenience.

^*^Angel^*^

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-06-21 12:58 PM

I loved this because it shows how much America, and other nations, no longer value the elderly as much…. Well, maybe I shouldn’t say that, instead it shows how some, not everyone, do not value the elderly. Which is sad but true… maybe it’ll help us think twice…

Although, I also loved this because of the “revenge”! You can’t help but feel sad for the person and yet cheer them on for taking them out of the will. I think you did an excellent job on this poem, it really draws the person into the story, makes them feel the emotions.

I can’t wait to see more of your work in the near future

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Internalexile
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 38
UK

4 posted 2006-06-21 07:00 AM

Thanks, I am glad you liked this

Internalexile

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

5 posted 2006-06-21 01:01 PM

Good poem. Sad and vengeful. I like it a lot!

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

6 posted 2006-06-21 05:10 PM

how sadly truthfull. we live in a throw away society. very touching. i know what you are going through

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

7 posted 2006-06-22 06:43 AM

Chilling read, as we expect for those who become older, to become more docile. Instead in this poem, we see plotting.

Very interesting piece.

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