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Hope? |
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niere Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77 |
It's so... Dark. Shadows create more shadows And the night eternal Reigns with fever and hurt. My life is a room, One. Little. Room. It could be nice, But I cannot clean. Filth accumulates And continues to grow Mercilessly. It's so dark... I even can't see my own tears anymore. I think I cry inwardly Because I'm ''getting on'' now. Life gets easier. Yet here in this room Bills for outstanding happiness Scatter the floor. I would pay them, But I cannot give, What I do not have... The dark grows darker, But I see the figures I adore Stood in each of the corners. They're so full of light...so happy. I crave their love and safety. But you cannot go into the light, When you're chained to the floor In the centre of your own madness. When strangers have come and broken your legs In the middle of nowhere. When you're chained to the floor, And everybody's looking the other way. Or else they say ''we haven't got a key''... It's hard to see the chains rotting away, When hope is something You forgot to buy. Because the addiction needs feeding, Needs pacifying. 3.30 a day - Everyday. You all have advice and wisdom... And I want it so badly... You have it painted all over the walls. But I cannot see black in black. All I need, Is to escape...me... But it's hard to not feel when you're tried, It's hard to pray when you're paralysed, It's hard to eat when you're sick, And it's hard to change, When you're afraid |
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Sorrow Member
since 2006-06-14
Posts 83Ireland |
I love your take on life in this poem. The way you say your life is like a messy, dark room. It sent a shiver down my spine as I can relate to that big time. Great piece niere! |
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Internalexile Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 38UK |
I agree with sorrow, a great write!  Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak... |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Well done. |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
Wow! How did you find a way to describe me , when we've never met? Are we twins? lol. Seriously though, this is Really Good! ^*^Angel^*^ |
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niere Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77 |
Thank you everybody for your comments. It means a lot. And Alone in the Dark, twins? Lol I wouldn't be that surprised!  |
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trUstNooNe Member
since 2006-05-21
Posts 91 |
like it alot, the ending is my favorite though!!love the emotion you put into it,you really painted a picture in my mind....*..... |
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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Very emotional, I liked it I feel every word. Nice write I enjoyed it! |
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yuna New Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 9 |
oh wow this is amazing! i feel like ive come across it before, you must be really talented! some day i hope to be as good as you. |
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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Wow!! You can write!!! I loved it Very, very nicely structured aswell! Would love to see more. |
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