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niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

0 posted 2006-06-11 03:49 PM

Nobody knows where I am right now,
But I lie below a rattled sky
With the stars randomly hung in place.
They shine dim without intention.
Dawn is their weakest moment,
and mystery, is their best feature.
True beauty.

Here in silence I speculate,
while the wind bites my body.
But cold I do not grow
For I am too numb already.
All that remains concsious in me
Is my heart and mind.
They tire.

This gaudy landscape truly does
Reflect me. Scarred and bruised,
Bumpy with rotted, dying features.
More cruel truths
That I must learn to accept with grace.
For I am the only honest one with me.
Desperate.

So I have now begun my search
In a different realm, with a different heart.
Wishfully and hopefully I try to feel
A new entity.
My mental arms grasping at dark and air
For something to cling to and be held by.
I should know better.

I curl into myself for protection,
holding my own hand in support.
Darkness & silence sooths the quiet frenzy inside.
I close my eyes and I pray
That never again shall they open.
Would anybody notice, If I stayed here forever?
No,

They wouldn't.

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

1 posted 2006-06-12 08:26 AM

beautifull absolutely beautifull. i got a lump in my throat reading this. it is trully inspired writing

niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

2 posted 2006-06-13 04:43 PM

Thank you so much. But I think the praise went too far lol.

Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

3 posted 2006-06-15 01:28 PM

The imagery in your poem is beautiful. I love the end aswell. It's so sad and moving.

Internalexile
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 38
UK

4 posted 2006-06-15 02:49 PM

The ending is so definate, Ireally enjoyed reading this.

Internalexile

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

yuna
New Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 9

5 posted 2006-07-20 02:03 AM

you seem to be very alone, do you have anyone to talk to about this? if you ever need to have someone to listen you can always send me a message.

loved the perfect portrayal of loneliness in this poem.

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