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Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

0 posted 2003-11-13 04:06 PM

I’m on a train that doesn’t want to stop
Twist off the cap and shove them down with a pop
There’s a season for everything you know
A season for the dead
A season for this empty head

I’m on a plane that doesn’t want to crash
Hypodermic and placed just beneath this pale flesh
There’s a reason for everything you know
A reason for the hate
A reason for this empty fate

A circle never ends
And I’m never loving you again
A finger never lies
And I’m never pointing at you again

Beneath these golden curls
Is a place for my victim
Beneath these golden curls
Is the place that I jump
But I’ll smile
Each and every mile…

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

1 posted 2003-11-14 10:11 AM

Very interesting, but very good.

~*~I'm a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

ranidae_poet
Member

since 2003-11-05

Posts 66
Texas,USA

2 posted 2003-11-14 02:34 PM

wow...very though provoking...

There are only three beings worth of respect; the priest, the solider and the poet; To know, To Kill and to create.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

3 posted 2003-11-15 12:05 PM

hmmmm, I like this, it is dark, yet there is hope. the title really caught my eye. I'm not so sure about the ryhme, but the overall theme and quality is awesome.
~Lexy

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

4 posted 2003-11-16 08:18 PM

*smiles* good one, you darkie. makes me feel empty, hopeless, and happy all at the same time

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- River

Starsfalling
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 94
some where deep in the shadows

5 posted 2003-11-17 12:07 PM

haha ive been gone a while but i had to come read this one...i loved the title, definitly grabs your attention...normally i dont like rhyming but it works pretty well here...great poem mad_hatter

-lance

There is no peace among the stars, only an eternity of carnage and slaughter and the laughter of thirsting gods

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

6 posted 2003-11-17 03:12 PM

each and every mile-keep on keepin on

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

wintertao
Member

since 2003-11-17

Posts 366
Okaloosa Island, FL

7 posted 2003-11-18 12:07 PM

nice work !

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

8 posted 2003-11-18 06:07 PM

*The Queen of Darkness bows to you*
Well done...
Until...ali
{alibaster}

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."(C)alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch and make you bleed its not worth it"(C)alibaster

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

9 posted 2003-11-20 10:46 PM

Thank you all for your responses. When I wrote this, I was really thinking about Marilyn Monroe, or really any famous woman for that matter. Hollywood; such a destructive topic...so sad. Thanks all.

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