»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #4
»
Rhino
| Dark Poetry #4 |
|
Rhino |
|
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
My music, It sings so loud I say what I want, Its not what you want to hear You need what I have to say On the radio Playing a broken guitar Speaking from my heart Using my mind Jesus on the strings Guiding my foot on the petal Jesus on the strings A dork singing on a broken guitar Rudolph taught me about the harp Street music for your ears God bless you people Incur a bane way of life Angels my friends and cash in my hand Hold to this. Its what I do The purpose God lay me here Not to get drunk and alcohol and girls Somber and broken on the lips of gray skies Jesus on the strings Guiding my foot on the petal Jesus on the strings A dork singing on a broken guitar Maybe if it weren't so simple I wouldn't be complicated I need a place to live But I really need to tell you about the bleeding lamb Before I die and my ghost bleeds as well On the radio Playing a broken guitar Speaking from my heart Using my mind Jesus on the strings Guiding my foot on the petal Jesus on the string A dork singing on a broken guitar I pray you find real love And real peace be etched within you Jesus |
||
| © Copyright 2006 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
i get that it a song, or the begingings of one, and i understand what you are trying to convey, but it seems a little disconnected, like the lines arent complete. i think this could be a spectacular one with a little polishing. (not to say anything, because myslef, I am real rusty) A cange is going to come... |
||
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Hey, thanks for the constructive criticism. I have a feeling I'll definietly make some changes when I write the music to it. Its how they go. I write down a roughdraft with lyrics and then when I put the music to it it usually changes a bit. I love it. Its like songs that I write pretty much rip me in half while I'm playing them unless I'm disconnected from it for some reason... but yeah... Thank you God bless, In Christ, -Craig Hey send me an e-mail sometime huh? It has been a while... Jesus |
||
|
Cherishable_Baybee Member
since 2006-01-04
Posts 57 |
Hey GIS i was wondering what does "Tombstaones without marks mean?" - Cherishable_Me - |
||
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
If you're refering to the typo... oops..., but "tombstones without marks" is kinda like a dead body without identification. Like everything in your life that has finally ended has come to nothing all the way to the point that even your tombstone is blank. Sorta how my life feels from time to time. God bless, In Christ, -Craig Jesus |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
