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Dark Poetry #4

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KatKali
Member

since 2008-01-03

Posts 67
Where the wispers grow louder

0 posted 2008-01-25 02:05 PM

Walk, people, Walk

I lay in blood,

To my regret,

They walk,

I'm not dead,

Come back,

They continue to walk,

Please! I scream,

No one hears,

They walk,

I was hit,

I scream my best friend’s name,

She walks,

Please! I’m not dead,

I yell for help,

They walk,

They are out of sight,

I continue to scream,

Walk, people, Walk.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

1 posted 2008-01-25 06:12 PM

I really like this one. It's like when your standing on the sidelines all by yourself wishing that someone would just come and say hi. Great write though!
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-01-26 01:18 AM

I agree though, somehow it seems more than just wishing for them to say hi. More than them just noticing. But thats just my oppinion.

KatKali
Member

since 2008-01-03

Posts 67
Where the wispers grow louder

3 posted 2008-01-26 06:17 PM

XxForever.BrokenxX is more correct of what its surpose to mean, That makes me feel like a b, I'm sorry, I feel like I'm picking sides or something.

Dark,
What does that mean?
Light,
What makes you so good?
Sin,
What is my Sin?
Only when you answer the first two will
you find the last.

Fareed
Member

since 2008-02-08

Posts 75

4 posted 2008-02-12 07:12 AM

Its so easy on the lips, tempting to read again.

KgIRL
Junior Member

since 2007-11-14

Posts 14
australia

5 posted 2008-02-15 06:45 AM

this reminds me of being turned away by my 'friends' when i wanted a warm bed. great work! dont change a thing!

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