»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #4
»
Stolen Coffee
| Dark Poetry #4 |
|
Stolen Coffee |
|
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
What I thought was free At one time was But its not Has a price within my range I'm not a thief On the spot What am I thinking? What did I do? Misconception just confusion With some help from the man in charge This literature is actually about Jesus To give Him glory Carry my cross humbly Apologizing sweetly And now all is fine I'll relax until its you to make me nervous Pass perfect opportunity for something else And all is fine and good I'll sit and relax Leave chaos behind in the grass and mud So what if my wings are too scratched, cut, and beat up to fly... I'll walk. |
||
| © Copyright 2006 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
deadkiss Junior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 31washington |
i think it sounds better "this literature is about jesus" the actually gets in the way to me. other then that this is very good. you have a cool style with your writing that has a bit of a feeling that you're on a drive with stops and speeding up and slowing down. i like that alot. |
||
|
green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Thank you. I see you've only posted 15 times as of right now and I appreciate you criticism. Again maybe I'll proof read a little more. Hey you know maybe it'll even improve my life damning communication skills which suck. Either that or its patience. Yeah... God bless, In Christ, -GIS So what if my wings are too scratched, cut, and beat up to fly... I'll walk. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
