my hair is in place (MAJOR RAMBLINGS)

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Dark Poetry #4

my hair is in place (MAJOR RAMBLINGS)

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-12-23 03:22 AM

hair in my face
quickly tucked behind my ear
how dare it sneak out
when i'm looking like this
for you
but i'm not all there
my hand is in yours, yes
and my hair in place, finally
but i'm wishing i was far away
from you

don't leave
i was having fun
my hair was behaving
it was a sign!
don't leave. just stay.
let go!
abandon me
i saw it in your eyes
you want me to go
so why not?
i never wanted to be here in the first place.
come back?
why?
i can't stay away either
right now
all i want is you

so why not?

*I am soooo sorry about this. i felt like being stupid. although, it doesn't feel stupid at the same time? well lets just say i feel very contradictory and indecisive, and we'll put it down to that. and anyway, that was fun!

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

Annie78
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 469
here then there then back here

1 posted 2005-12-23 10:23 AM

it's okay....have been here and this was fun but kinda sad. happy holidays
Annie

there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

2 posted 2005-12-23 05:48 PM

yea
seriously the worst i've ever written
only cause i've never written like this before
but yea..
merry christmas!

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

Annie78
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 469
here then there then back here

3 posted 2005-12-30 02:17 PM

i doubt seriously it is the worst, maybe not the best but certainly better than some i have written.
Annie

there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

4 posted 2006-01-10 02:00 AM

Love! Stop running yourself down!
How dare you, writing is writing, at least you're doing it. I quite liked it actually.
Quite a nice take on everything, how can things be turning bad if your hair looks good.
(Mabel you old fool!)

Hollow.
Courts.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

5 posted 2006-01-17 01:02 PM

I agree with them, i thought the idea behind the quick moving from thought to thought was interesting, especially the way you used it. Good write

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

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