Dark Poetry #4 |
Not quite human |
Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
For those who don't belong... Not quite human Not quite alien Not quite a clear image yet Not sure what to make of it Not quite organic Not quite aligned Not quite a clear picture here Not sure what do with this What a picture for a wall A boy so thin He can’t be seen at all What a story for a book A man so weak No one dares to look Is it such a crime? Are we never to be heard? Will you never hear us speak Because our mouths are blurred? Is this so far fetched? We have never been relieved You shot us not a glance Since the first we ever breathed Not quite human No, not quite there Not quite human No, not quite square Here, somewhere in-between Not quite alien But close enough in shapes Not quite alien But a pose away from apes |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Nevermind the black furry sweater, the soft undertones tell speak power and light. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
excellent. i only wish you could have built some rythm into the repetions of the first and last stanza. -majnu |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
sweet... i loved the 'not quite human' 'not quite alien' concept very cool. Enjoyed the read much Peace "i said 'How bout a revelution' and he said 'Right' i said oh, you say ah, i say revelution and you say ja,That was the craziest game of poker" |
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HAZMATTO Junior Member
since 2005-11-24
Posts 14 |
A pose away from apes was a nice touch. Forever trying to answer the question of who and what we are. Very good read |
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