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xFromtheHeartx
Member

since 2005-09-24

Posts 80
Florida U.S.

0 posted 2005-10-04 09:48 PM

Our Time is Over

Our time is up
The end is now
Yet, I wonder how
It ended fast
Is it because of our twisted past

She said its right
I hope it'll end without a fight
Causei think, this is our last night
Ill be left in the moonlight

To think of what we could have had
This makes me so mad
Of the thought that i never deserved her
My life is becomeing a blur

Our time is up
The end is now
Even yet, i wonder how
My life fell apart so fast
I wish i could change the past
For the light that once shined upon me
Has left me with nothing else to see

I think she is right
Its going to end this very night
With so many things left unsaid
I think im better off dead

The time is up
The end now
And this is how
My story goes
This is how
The story goes
And now you know
How it all ends
The way she said "lets just be friends"
That is how
Our story ends

dark poetry seems to be where my poems shouldnt stand out too much. i hope you guys enjoy this. peace

Angelheart
Senior Member

since 2005-09-08

Posts 754
Jacksonville,FL USA

1 posted 2005-10-04 09:53 PM

wow, this is such emotion in this one, tells how much you feel on how life can be like, this is a good write, and I do thankyou for sharing this.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

sweetpoetess
Member

since 2005-02-27

Posts 428
Florida

2 posted 2005-10-05 12:08 PM

Life can be hard. Especially when ya can't seem to find the right person to date. Keep up the awesome poetry!!!

Poetry is beauty in words.

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

3 posted 2005-10-05 11:11 PM

Lovely words...always remember...
"There are many ends to start new beginings...
and so they will continue, end to end".

Until...alibaster {the Queen of Darkness}

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it"-alibaster

rockbabe
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 105

4 posted 2006-01-30 06:41 AM

I understand exactly....

tatalinia
Member

since 2005-12-17

Posts 137
CA, US

5 posted 2006-02-20 02:23 AM

this poem was really good, an i can definently relate to it.

I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health

SATURN
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 78
ok,us

6 posted 2006-02-20 12:38 PM

Much Emotion I Know How You Feel But No One is Better Off Dead.

byski
Member

since 2006-01-26

Posts 235
Alberta, Canada

7 posted 2006-02-21 11:15 AM

Right there with you on that one. I like the structure of it too, the last stanza convays the message of hopelessness in my opinion. But such is life. I agree 100% with alibaster's quote, we all have to try and find a new beginning in the end of something we hold dear. Good write and I'm looking forward to the next one.

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