Dark Poetry #4 |
Am I really that silent |
spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
What am I supposed to do When everything seems wrong And it feels as if you've given up Like you no longer hear my song You've looked away I missed a step My heart stopped beating I've lost my breath Retreating into my world I just cant get My head To wrap around The facts Acting as if I don't want the comfort Of a hug Or someone holding my hand When things seem to go wrong And I can't stop the tears From flowing What am I supposed to do When I can't ask for help And no one sees the blood Or the scars And all I want to do Is drink To relieave this pain Yet still No one hears me Am I really that silent I am not alive. Just a shell mearly moving with what is left of a ghost. An echo I am whats left after the true thing has left. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I hear you and I know that feeling~~ M |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
Thanks, :-, I am not alive. Just a shell mearly moving with what is left of a ghost. An echo I am whats left after the true thing has left. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
No Darling...you aren't silent at all. Your words hurt me...not in any kind of way that's particularly bad...but gives me a pang...as if...I needed to be there...as if I tried too hard to bring you out of yourself. I'm sorry if I've made things bad for you! I really care for you...and this poem shows just how much pain you've been subjected to...please get in touch with me...please... Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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gelato Member
since 2005-10-27
Posts 63TN,USA |
Your feelings show through in this poem. I know the feeling and had considered writing one about what i was feeling, until I saw your poem and discovered that yours was so much better. I have the same feeling, but not the words to express them yet. Very good on this!! "Buckle Up! It makes it harder for the aliens to suck you out of your car" |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
thanks guys sorry for the late reply back so much has just gone one recently that the internet was impossible I am not alive. Just a shell mearly moving with what is left of a ghost. An echo I am whats left after the true thing has left. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
yes...i know that feeling. all too well. still do. beautifully written. i felt the pain...and the i heard you. I ask why, but in my mind, |
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