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Dark Poetry #4

A Walk in Thought

alibaster
Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 299
In my own private hell...(PA).

0 posted 2005-09-26 01:37 PM

The mist gathers
dancing in beautiful swirls
as I take a slow and foreboding walk
deep in thought.
We all return
to witness the memories fade
and the bridges burn.
Forgetting is a lesson hard to learn.
Time healing all
is a myth scrolled up a wall.
Sweet surrender
is only given when there is no hope.
Time stands still
when a heart has had its fill.
All tears dry
only when there is no reason left to cry.
Life is fleeting
when one doesn’t slow down to see the dreaming.
And death becomes us all
when we have no place left to fall.

alibaster Sept. 25, 05

"There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."-alibaster

"If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it"-alibaster

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2005-09-26 09:31 PM

Right on! This is so true, and such a powerful ending.

Life is fleeting
when one doesn’t slow down to see the dreaming.
And death becomes us all
when we have no place left to fall.

Well done~

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

2 posted 2005-09-26 09:59 PM

I do believe your writing has grown even more.

YES, YES, and more YES! to all of this poem. I agree...the old sayings for comfort are simply that....for comfort, because they aren't true most of the time.

"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real"
-Linkin Park_

xFromtheHeartx
Member

since 2005-09-24

Posts 80
Florida U.S.

3 posted 2006-02-25 05:12 PM

boy howdy, can i relate. this was a very nice piece. i enjoyed reading it muchs and ill be reading more of your poetry, hopefully, when im less busy.

ndo if you remember me, but you commented on several poems of mine before i quit, and now im back! ive posted several poems, check'em out. good writing and peace

desert-spike
Member

since 2006-02-01

Posts 194
TX/USA

4 posted 2006-02-26 04:33 PM

Oooo...That was a very fun read, thanx. ~.^

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