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Under My Skin
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Under My Skin |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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This morning when I got out of bed I had an itch I had to scratch On my leg discolored patch Dark brown bruises lined with red Numbers of bruises I had to know Hoping to see a little bit better Standing before a full sized mirror Hundreds of bruises from head to toe Itching would stop, and then begin Scratching until the skin turned red From the bruise I saw the head Of the wasp buried under my skin Alicat 5/3/05 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You warned me that this layered, and yet I find myself arguing your intent anyhow. Not being comfy in my own skin, I loved your visual of bee trapped inside and stinging--nod, that's how it feels to my addicted self, to want to calm/cease that grim battle, if only for a little while. I can also read illness into it as well (my mystery bruises yanno) and it doesn't seem to matter which way I read it, it leaves me with a feeling of frustration and helplessness. You have a knack of the surreal metaphor bro. Not always a cozy, comfy read, but sometimes I think it's meant to sting. I sure hope this all made sense. *hugs* I've been at war with that wasp a long, long time... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I think perhaps a few of us have our own wasps, as I know I sure do. I don't think I could ever describe the sucker as well as you did here though. This one frustrates for sure, and somehow your poem truly exemplifies the helplessness of not being able to really scratch the itch. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
When you know something that you can't see. Its pretty much the same. -GIS ...and the way things are goin, they're gonna crucify me. -The Beattles |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Thank you all for the responses. Some background on this one: Several years ago I had a dream so vivid that it woke me up with a nasty start and had me extremely spooked. In the dream, my legs started to itch. When I looked, there was this brown oval bruise. After scratching and scratching, the bruise split, and a wasp started to crawl out from beneath the skin. That woke me, and my legs were itching like mad. That spooked me, and I was up tearing the sheets off the bed looking for insects!  Later I learned of ichneuman wasps, which lay eggs in, on, or near other insects, who in turn become food for the hatching larva. Just a slight phobia I have about insects on my skin. |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
I like this. I eagerly anticipate the day that whatever is under my skin comes out. Inspiring. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
my skin is crawling... but i like Mad Hatters comment... i'm waiting for the same thing... Good read tho, a little eerie, but i enjoyed it "I go to parties sometimes until 4, it's hard to leave when you can't find the door..." Joe Walsh |
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