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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2005-02-24 12:19 PM

Sway,
I see the bloodstains on your pillow
Cry,
And my eyes just filled with love
Because I know
You dreamt about me last night.

Fall,
I see your footprints in the sand
Die,
It pains you to realize
I know
That I walk as your shadow.

Well,
When you hold my hand I blister
And,
Even though I shattered every picture
(I need…)
Let’s leave together.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2005-02-24 01:34 AM

that part about You know I dreamt about you last night, kinda freaked me out, because Chaotic Chaos is about the dream I had last night. Actually Its almost like Chaos (the keeper) is talking to me through this poem.

Is a cool poem. And despite the more than likely not quite right perception I received from it, I liked it.

-GIS

Corruption is caused by holes in obedience to God.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2005-02-24 11:01 AM

Why is it that it is those of us who are most broken that have the most love to give? And are the ones who most want and need it?

"For in the company of the beautifully scarred..."

This was awesome!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

NightFall
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 88
The land known as England

3 posted 2005-02-24 03:05 PM

very well writeen, i really like this, i also liked the layout, seemed original.
luv C.J

The greatest thing you will ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2005-02-24 10:09 PM

Im really loving your work! I especially loved the end of this one. Another for the library.

If I could fall asleep tonight
you know I’d dream of you
and wake up wondering
why my heart is so cold
~WinterWren~

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

5 posted 2005-02-24 10:30 PM

Thanks for replying guys

Hmm, I don't know. I sort of see this as a weird dream. But its real in the way I wrote I guess. I can't really analyse this one. But thanks for replying.

Hollow.
Courts.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

6 posted 2005-02-28 06:05 PM

oh! I love that ending!

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