Dark Poetry #4 |
the talk |
darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
sit down and look right through me hold my hands but dont feel them ignore my tears listen intently but dont agree nod and sigh but dont disagree hear me out quietly but convincingly not letting on your mind is on another woman with a prettier face look concerned as i sob but dont hug me watch me plead with my eyes as my brow furrows and my voice gets angrier but dont answer back watch me want you and need you watch me sigh but dont sympathise see me see my torn heart but dont remember it was your fault *NOTE: any ideas for a better title would be great. Thanks* nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
I really liked that one... i could really feel it. Dude.. i know it must suck sooo much the whole break up with bj.. but i totally reckon you can make it through, and come out the other side a better person. remember i'm always there for you . awesome poem. loved the second stanza. Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it. |
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rm711 Member
since 2002-11-30
Posts 131Wiltshire, England |
awesome poem. I liked the fact that everything seemed so raw. and destructive. x |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
oops lol. i meant the third stanza... silly me Pride is holding your head up, when everyone else has their's lowered. Courage is what makes you do it. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Awww. I can't think of anything to say, cuz I'm talking to you now. Oh, no there you go. There's alot of hurt in this poem. It's sad. "Hold your head high and reach the top" I have that annoying song and a rather good one in my head. "Helloooo, I'm trying to focus but my eyes deceive me. Focus......." Anyway. Did you know we had to keep our F3 english workbook for this year???? I think I threw mine out... Love you. Hollow. Courts. And the legacy runs from needles to guns |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
bloody brilliant. hope he finally sits down and talks with you. xoxo you're the only one keeping me alive |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
disheartened. a torn heart. i felt this one... a well done job of conveying here... of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep. |
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