Minorchiselfreedomwait - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Dark Poetry #4

Minorchiselfreedomwait

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2004-12-14 11:24 PM

My room, alone.
focus far away
on everything that could be,
tomarrow.

Problem, this;
caged in solitary physical location,
slave of social expectations,
no, of time,
driving to chisel feverisly
out of some status known as -
minor.

Head races faster than time,
but doesn't make faster reality.
Still June 17th 2005.
Still day before tomarrow.

Dare I hope for sunrise?
Clock drums, sun hides.
Anticipation evolves,
emancipation unwanted.
Afraid freedom simply disguises
yet another prison,
another jurisdiction of can't do's,
not good enough's
waiting to hammer thier way around me.

So, what's the point?
Why should I allow another moment,
this twisted existence of eternal kind?

Fears rest only for hope alone,
another voice that drowns doubt,
"If you don't go...you won't know"
So, hand to me on golden plate,
life as never been, tomarrow.

"Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-12-14 11:38 PM

Very artistic. I loved it. It was to the point and very beautiful. Its one of those that I don't want to relate to, and can't; while at the same I do, all the way.
*smile or grin or whatever

-GIS

let God ROAR,... in power...

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-12-14 11:40 PM

Crap. I forgot to add.

-GIS

let God ROAR,... in power...

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

3 posted 2004-12-15 12:13 PM

brilliant

very artisic, not so much dark though.

magnificent. loved it

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2004-12-16 09:02 PM

ooo! i like this! great stuff River.
- LOr

you're the only one keeping me alive

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.