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Dark Poetry #4

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NightFall
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 88
The land known as England

0 posted 2004-11-29 12:20 PM

I enterd the room on my left
the darkness swallowed time
my foot prints dissapered
and i lost my mind
in time
In time everything moves fast
or slow
theres no knowing where i will go
in time
im lost
Travelling around in time
looking through the windows
out on to the world
in time
your lost
your foot prints have been and gone
the world is settiling
from your loss
the cards are yet to fall
time goes slow
when time is lost
time goes slow when you are to.
"I sufferd a loss recentley a lot of my poems recentley are due to that, all my feeling go on the screen or paper"

"My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

1 posted 2004-11-29 09:00 PM

I loved this poem

The repition worked really well I thought.

Im sorry to hear of your loss... I hope the writing is helping you vent the emotions.

your lost
your foot prints have been and gone
the world is settiling
from your loss
the cards are yet to fall

this bit was great

love and empathy
sophie

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

NightFall
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 88
The land known as England

2 posted 2004-11-30 02:54 PM

Thankyou for your reply its appriceated, im glad you liked it, i live this one personally, it says what im feeling. thankyou for your time
love cheryl(NightFall)

"My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere.

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