Dark Poetry #4 |
need you now |
silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
so many times i wanted to hold you hold you touch you love you but you were not there for me were not there right beside me when i needed you most and i need you now like so many times before i need you now. * short and stupid. but havent written in ages so trying to vent your the only one keeping me alive |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hmm i like umm not ur best but very cool. wish it was longer though! love and empahy darknes PS sry reply is tres short but yeah can't think of anything else to say. hmm nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"but you were not there for me were not there right beside me when i needed you most" Yeh, I know that feeling. I've had writer's block too for awhile...atleast you were able to write something...lol. ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
Eh, there are days when nothing seems to come out right, but soonly it'll go back to normal. Promise. "World's use is cold, world's love is vain, world's cruelty is bitter bane; but is not the fruit of pain." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I think the idea could have been developed, but still, short was refreshing and honest. Hollow. Courtney. Beautiful Lor. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Yes it was short, but not stupid. Very real. And the beauty is you could've stopped at the very first line and had a most beautiful poem... "So many times" Thanks for sharing! Rider "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I Agree With NFN. It Was Real, And Beautifully Put, Honesty At It's Best ... |
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