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Dark Poetry #4

Bleed for ME

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

0 posted 2004-11-19 12:13 PM

I want you, for once
To feel how I always have
I want you to be upset,
To laugh when you're mad

It isn't like me
To be so cruel,
But right now I'd pay
To see you in a pool
(of my warm blood)

Look at what you've done
I hope you're feeling bad
Look at what you've done
To a friend you once had.

I laugh as I lay dying
At the same time you start crying

Don't waste your tears.
Are they saved up from all these years? I'm flattered.
But it's about time you cried
About something that actually mattered (To You)

To you
To you
(I hope you find peace within yourself)
To you
To you
(I'm writing To You as I'm burning in hell)

*I'm thinking I wanna make this a song, but i dont know...any suggestions would be greatly appreciated...

peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

1 posted 2004-11-19 02:36 AM

This would make a really good song... I think it would have to be hard rock though...
Great work!
~*~peaceful~*~

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

2 posted 2004-11-19 05:26 PM

peaceful_dreamer- I definitely agree lol. thanx for your reply

~*brezee*~

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
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3 posted 2004-11-19 08:08 PM

I like this alot...I think it would make a really cool song.

~Alli~

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