Dark Poetry #4 |
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Voices |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
What do they say to you? The voices inside your head, Are they unhelpful? Or are they your best friends? Do they give you views on right and wrong? Or take away the pain, Do you really need them? Or is it an excuse for the rain From your eyes Shall we sit in this silence? Let our faces do the communicating Shall we sit in this silence? Waiting for the end, Is everything ok? Is everything all right? Tell me. Before we run out of expressions. It’s easy to believe you’ll be fine, Then it gets harder than it seems, You hide the face, Yeah, I’m pretty good at feelings. Do the voices in your head tell you what to do? Do they surround you and tell you it’s not true. Do the voices in your head walk you off the ledge? Do they smother you and walk you away. To a better day Are you getting better? Or is it just the same. I’d tell you not to cry, To dry your eyes, and smile. But it’s too late, It would be the same as Telling you to die, To say good-bye’s and fly. Are the voices telling you to hate? Or do they sit in silence, And wait. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
COURTS GRRRRRRRR U ALWAYS DO THIS TO ME!!! fluck this was so powerful ahhh cant choose a favoutite part but girl this is one of my favs of urs definitly. cant think of nethin worthy to say so ill just say bye love and empathy always babe sophie nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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NightFall Member
since 2004-01-28
Posts 88The land known as England |
WOW SO STRONG this is a great piece, you showed your emotions in simple words. just WOW cool. NightFall "My only love sprung from my only hate to early seen unkown and known to late" Romeo and juliet- William shakespere. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
And with thus, the amazement continues. Hollow, you are everything but (hollow)! Shall we? Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
This IS really great. "Do the voices in your head tell you what to do? Do they surround you and tell you it’s not true. Do the voices in your head walk you off the ledge? Do they smother you and walk you away. To a better day Are you getting better? Or is it just the same." --That part in particular just really stood out at me, but the write as a whole is very cool too...great job! ~*brezee*~ |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
damn it girl. your poems drive me crazy with their sheer brilliance. i am always in so much awe of the power behind your writing. "I’d tell you not to cry, To dry your eyes, and smile. But it’s too late, It would be the same as Telling you to die, To say good-bye’s and fly. Are the voices telling you to hate? Or do they sit in silence, And wait." i just...omg..my favourite bit. so brilliant. lots of love, Kirsty "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
Holy Crap Batman!!! I mean Hollow...=) this is great, i like the rythm & rhyme thing ya got goin...and the words...sheesh, the words...owwwch. ![]() - River "Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
*sigh* This is one of those "I want to write like that poems... I guess that's all that needs saying. "World's use is cold, world's love is vain, world's cruelty is bitter bane; but is not the fruit of pain." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Tell me. Before we run out of expressions. I loved that line. very good. bravo. |
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stevebrklynnyc Member
since 2004-01-04
Posts 292GA, Camden |
Excellent! Sometimes I wish I could turn off the voices, but they sometimes are a necessary evil. We all need them, that's what makes us who we are. Great job, Steve. |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Awesome poem!!! ![]() GREAT JOB!! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
ah. i forgot to save this last time i replied. so that is what im doing now. "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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