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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Melted hold of frozen fear You slip The ground tears and you slide The pressure Tense strangle of this thing you know What I was What am I What are you Just listen to her Thick layer double decked secret Friends Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Now we seem to be getting kwite abstract in our words of wisdom, Green! This was indeed a great, albeit unique write. Makes me wonder the poet's train of thought; makes me wonder what "she" said! Intriguing indeed. Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
the precarious thing about being a reader of poetry, purity, is that you may never know exactly what the writer intended from his point of view. see, sometimes convictions are a double-edged sword. they tug at the heart. but, for me, i'd say you already know what her words were. why worry, hide and wonder? be honest, be yourself and quit wasting time with melodrama. you'd be surprised the outcome. but wait, what's life without all the melodrama? would make one's story so short that there would have to be a lot of stupid insurance and hamburger commercials to fill the void, right? god, she can be so blunt! i understand, craig. at least i understand that this was awesome! gnosis=knowledge and eve=me. go figure... i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Yeah thats about right. She is indeed blunt. lol. I can't remember, but did I ask you what your name meant. I've been wondering about it for a little while. -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Now her words sound a bit like a former capeside lady friend... Hum...? If we've been sharing, Eve, then I believe I understand the title of this one. (Duh Purity! I know...lol) Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
Purity, your head seems to have become as Eve. Perhaps my feet have gotten a little muddy, and I'm sorry. -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
There is nothing sorry about you, Green! You are most cool... I was just lost... way lost...lol You guys rock. Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
A little confused, actually, but now I know what your name means...!!!!! Great poem, I just want to jump on the bandwagon and say it too "Yes, she can be blunt." Mmmm, hamburger commercials....I think after reading it twice, I like it better now.  Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
That one has so many layers to it. Its like the closet to a bathroom found somewhere down the tracks of a subway. What my name means? -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
and no, greeny...i'm by no means mad. well, a lot of people think i am in the psycho sense...lol i'm just basking in the ray of friendships! i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
*sigh*...great write!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
Depends on whether the "her" is Eve, or someone the rest of us are clueless about. Either way, there's a case for a closet here. (AAAAAAARRRRRRRGGGGHHHH.....) Sad that people ever, ever feel they have to hide a part of thelselves. I wanna be the first to go in that closet! I'll waltz matilda as I guide you out. If you love someone, be not ashamed, dammit! "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
the her is not Eve, and the closet must have trap door or two. -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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EveGnosis Member
since 2002-02-21
Posts 300New York, USA |
lol. did i say bold? lol and now that pip-oscar "touche'" award purity was handing out must be given to you, green_freaky_stuff. i am amused. i needed it tonight. i'll always need a friend, one i can defend. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
No! Eve's name. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I guess that is how you get attention. Say something somewhat controversal and then when you say it do it abstract, and play it out. lol. Hooray! I have recieved an award and my name has been altered a bit to fit. lol. Courtney, that question was for Eve. lol -GIS Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a |
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