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Ladycat 
since 1999-07-05
Posts 782At the edge and a doorway,TX 
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I stood there staring down down into what was left of you there Nothing came out of my mouth Though I remembered that I knew what words were When were they words I stood there crying weeping weeping into my cloth Until they took my hand and moved me I think I walked away Yet I don't know if I even knew how to walk then I stood there exsisting dying dying for peace of mind or peace and quiet From the noise in my head that missed you I reached out and touched your hand If cold is an emotion; I know I feel it now Love, Ladycat "Everything changes, everything stays the same."-Bill Austin |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
Wow. this is great... "If cold is an emotion; I know I feel it now." deep words...I know what you mean. great stuff here! - River "Stained by the sun, I can see colors...colors of mercy washing over me." - 3 Minutes From Home |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ladycat: you are one amazing poetess, this is astounding writing. From the noise in my head that missed you awesome line btw |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Ah sigh, this was sad, but the words ay carumba (too much grant who has seen too much simspons) they just fitted and they worked and....beautiful poem Ladycat. Hollow. Courtney. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
A powerful read. This reminds me of my Mother during my Father's "Remembrance Ceremony"...watching her standing at his casket... Very affecting and emotion-filled. |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
ah, but at least you feel.  Neither night nor day can give me purchase only purged dust on earth can avenge the worthless. |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
This is amazing - loved the way you ended it ~*~peaceful~*~ "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
If cold is an emotion; I know I feel it now Oh I just love the above line... a great write Ladycat Maree into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"If cold is an emotion; I know I feel it now" So sad..   ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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