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vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

0 posted 2004-10-05 11:36 PM

Standing here, pretending
To be having a normal
Conversation,
With my friends,
Over the usual-this and that.

But all my attention
Is focused on you
Are you focused on me?
I just want to meet your standards,
All I want is for you to
Tell me,
How much you care,
How much you want,
How much you need
Me.

But i turn back to
My friends,
And cover the pain
Built up inside.
As I hide these feelings
I fall into my tap
Of terrifying thoughts
That push me to the edge.

Pounding through my head
Spinning the world
Faster
Until I collapse
With the words
Imprinted in my head.

Why am I not good enough?

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-10-06 12:07 PM

all your poems, if u dnt mind me saying, or most of them seem to be about this 'you'. cud this be a guy? and cud u feel u rnt good enough for him?

newsflash hun, if he hasnt fallen for u yet, hes not gud enuf for u. cough cough ive given my advice and bak to the poem.

i liked lots! spesh the paragraph ending in
Me.

gud job

LOR

put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

2 posted 2004-10-06 12:10 PM

um..the ones that i write about a "you" they are mostly about a guy...
but some of them are just in general, just a general "you" meaning all the people that i know in my life.
so yeah..but the ones that are more directed at one person are about him..
Kirst.

"Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-10-06 09:38 AM

you are, it sounds as if you are surrounded by ones who do not see YOU.

Nice write.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

4 posted 2004-10-07 01:59 AM

Omg the first stanza, seemed so like....me I guess. Wow, that hit me hard. I like the reality that comes from all your poems, everyone can relate and...they are all so special. All touching different aspects of my life.

Hollow.
Courtney.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

5 posted 2004-10-07 10:18 AM

YOU! - taught me to fight. YOU! - put me on top of the world again. Feeling so high... YOU! - love like a well that can never run dry. So, never run dry vamp ~ The yous in your writings will one day catch up to the knowledge of just how magnificent you are. Loved it!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

6 posted 2004-10-08 06:24 PM

damn, i just saw a typo in this one.. "trap" not "tap"!

the lone light, in a world of darkness.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

7 posted 2004-11-10 12:09 PM

hey, i read this one before, but didnt reply, cuz i didnt have time, and i was going through some of ur poems, and i saw this one....I can completely relate to this one...wow. I had tears in my eyes as i read this. I do this weveryday I stare at him, adn try to play it off...okay, well how bout' i email you and yeah, cuz well...yeah. lol

good peom though. I loved it..

Kissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

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