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EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

0 posted 2004-10-01 01:12 AM

if you shed a tear for me today
then i'm still in your heart
and maybe in some teeny kind of way
we've not been forced apart
when the tear trails down to its destiny's end
it'll glisten there for me
and as time passes, you'll heal, my friend
inside that single tear, i'll always be.

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

1 posted 2004-10-01 07:52 PM

Sad. But great.

Hollow.

P.S. Your signature seemed to fit this one.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

2 posted 2004-10-01 10:31 PM

And you tell me to stop causing tears??? Geesh, Eve, you went and got all great on me. This is my favorite of yours by far. Short, extremely poetic, sad, and yet offers eternal hope. EXCELLENT!..and I agree with Hollow about the signature, but even moreso your pic...

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

3 posted 2004-10-02 11:35 PM

Read it again, cried again. Want to see more! (And yes, you owe me another round of tear filled glasses for bumping you gratuitously.) There's just so many wonderfully genuine people on this site that I am fortunate they share of themselves. I gave this to my Mom today, in memory of my brother, and for the first time, she allowed herself to cry.

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

4 posted 2004-10-03 12:37 PM

Nicely done.
I especially loved the use of the word
teeny
in such a dramatic poem.

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

5 posted 2004-10-03 02:17 AM

hollow... i thank you for taking time to read and respond!
purity... thank you. i hope the words gave comfort instead of causing pain to your mother.
news...'preesh! yeah, teeny was a gamble word for what i was trying to convey, but glad it worked for you.

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

6 posted 2004-10-03 08:22 PM

Hiding in the shadow of a tear.

Though sad, it is a lovely concept.

Thanks,

Billy 8)

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2004-10-04 07:52 PM

Good Lord Michael, I needed this today.

It is utter beauty and means more to me than you shall ever realize, thank you.

gelato
Member

since 2005-10-27

Posts 63
TN,USA

8 posted 2005-11-02 02:30 PM

This IS great, Eve. I could feel my heart being tugged from the first line.

"Buckle Up! It makes it harder for the aliens to suck you out of your car"

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

9 posted 2005-11-04 10:26 AM

the tear the magic to our souls ,beautiful poem.

Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

10 posted 2005-11-22 05:08 PM

this is a great poem. i really enjoyed it and it's immorality.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

Robot_Parade
New Member

since 2005-11-20

Posts 6
Derby, UK

11 posted 2005-11-22 05:48 PM

I liked this. It was short and simple, but worked perfectly.

"It's easy for you. You're always happy. You see a peanut, the day's off to a good start. You see some soil, it's a jamboree."

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

12 posted 2005-11-29 01:51 AM

I haven't taken the time to reread the poem. When I was looking at the other responses the word "marijuana" came to mind, so I just wanted to tell you I love you my friend and so does Jesus and that if you do have any vices its nothing that Jesus can't handle and show you love in a way that would remove the desire for anything that you would do that would cause you harm. God bless and I love you bro.

-GIS

Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit.

bgj
Member

since 2005-11-09

Posts 128
Ga. USA

13 posted 2005-11-29 03:19 PM

Wonderfully written, I enjoyed very much. Lots of luck,
bgj

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

14 posted 2005-11-29 09:10 PM

EveGnosis, This is beautifully done.Thank you.It was just the thing for me to read this evening. martyjo

Annie78
Member

since 2003-10-03

Posts 469
here then there then back here

15 posted 2005-12-01 09:25 PM

as the others i needed this today....thank you.
Annie

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

16 posted 2005-12-24 12:25 PM

Just bumping this up a bit.I think it speaks a lot in different ways to a lot of us. martyjo

shades of paul
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since 2005-12-14

Posts 370
In Reality

17 posted 2005-12-28 09:31 AM

A very nice poem, much enjoyed....paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

18 posted 2005-12-28 11:16 PM

wonderful write
much enjoyed.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

19 posted 2008-01-01 02:08 AM

At the 5th anniversary of my brother's death, this poem has been ringing in my ears.
Thank you for such beautiful words. They mean the world to me, and to my family, during this sorrowful time.

Love always,

Purity

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

20 posted 2008-01-01 10:27 AM

Its been a while. The "marijuana" deal may be just stupid. This is a good poem. Happy New Year.

-GIS

Keep your pants on, Jesus loves you

blue face
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

21 posted 2008-01-01 02:37 PM

great poem!
although its short i injoyed it.
happy NEW YEARS!
blue.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

22 posted 2008-01-06 02:43 AM

wow...thanks! this one is such an early one.

the fact that you all brought it back to life only serves to bring back the memories.

time to cry once more.

peace.

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

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