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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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boiling within me is this pain i cant explain cant understand cant control and i just want to know if anything will ever come of this or if i'll be left to stand alone in the cold again watching you turn away watching you close your eyes leaving this like it is dont leave me hanging on a thread so breakable so fragile that at any moment the pain will force me to contort and writhe and buckle this thread and fall flat fall on my face for you and you'll just watch that same empty look on your face the one thats says you dont care or is it that you care too much? too much you have to turn away pretend nothing ever happened cause thats whats best for me, right? cause you think i'd be better off without you but you dont know you will never know just how worse off i'd be you wont even begin to realise how dead i'd be without you without your touch without your face without those eyes so dont tell me i'm better off dont tell me whats best for me cause no matter what you say i'll twist it around so all points to you put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus [This message has been edited by silhouetted (09-19-2004 01:42 AM).] |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
YOU HAVE IT BACK! you have every ounce of inspiration back. i am so glad. so happy. so amazed and impressed. bloody hell, this was great. nice end, nice beginning, nice middle, nice theme....or not so nice as it may be, but great great great prodigious work. eek! Hollow, Courts. xxx I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
wow dont know wot to say dude this one really hit a chord or two umm i defintily really really liked it and i really like ur toher two as well, but i wont bother replying to them cus my comps screwed. i love it keep on keeping on nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Laura? this is why I love writing, raw packed emotion . . . amazing write, missy . . . |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
thanks i was quite proud of this one. it reminded me of how i used to write. prob cuz i was just reading some of my old stuff and the replies i got there, and they were way better than the ones i get now. So i changed back to my old writing self! or the fact that i got my inspiration from jewel again may help.... LOR put your frustrations into four letter words - incubus |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
wow.. this one gave me shivers all down my spine... i LOOVED it.. yes, thats right, not only did i LOVE it..i went so far as to LOOVE it! two O's! Kirsty (i know im insane..) "Why are you wearing that stupid man suit?"-Frank from Donnie Darko |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Damn... I really loved this one too. It made me sad. Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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