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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
I try to get away from you But I can't You are my addiction The oxygen I need to live. But now I'm drowning I can't breathe Choking on too much air My mind is not the same My actions not even my own Just carbon copies Of how I think You might act, feel, move. I try to get away Break my addiction to you My poisoned mind is breaking down I love you so much, I hate you Yet i don't even know you It feels like my purpose is to be with you Then I hang my head in shame Hating for being like everyone else Just another one of the masses But no one, none of them, see you The way I do. They don't understanf you at all I see past your voice and looks I see into your soul, your inner core. Smother me now Before I fall Completely into Insanity. "Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Wonderful... The last lines are especially memorable and effective. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
damn chik... I loved this... The ending was the best. I know how it fels, been there and done that, and dont ever wanna go there again. It hurts. Like i said before...Damn Karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
Sweet action! I really like this...and I, along with others, I'm sure, can or have been able to relate at one point in time...awesome job, I love how you can feel it as you read it...keep up the great work!  ~*brezee*~ |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
tra la la "I cannot stand the way you tease, I love you though you hurt me so"-Marilyn Manson |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
tra la la la LA |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
lovely feelin betta? after you let all that out??? i know its hard for you. love and empathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
huh? let what out? whats hard? im confused, i wrote this poem like AGES ago.... those "tra la la" things, were cuz i needed to post something to put it into my library, cuz i haven't figured out another way yet..and i forgot the first time, so i had to do it again. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Well New Or Old, The Poem Was Great, And I Like Most Of The Others LOVED The Ending... I'd Rather Be Hated For Who I Am Then Loved For What I'm Not~!~ |
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News_From_Nowhere Member
since 2002-06-14
Posts 173CU, NY |
"Choking on too much air"... There's always something refreshing in each of your sullen writes! 'Nother good'un!! "So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm" |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Weird, our conversation was sort of like that, as someone said before, last lines were awesome. Great write. Hollow. Courts. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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