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PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

0 posted 2004-09-07 01:31 PM

I know, in time,
you'll walk away.
Pretend you see,
Just LOOK at me.

You'll shake your head,
cluck disapproval,
Throw in a gift,
arrange my removal.

Leave me lying on the floor,
forgotten.
Is this what life is for?

And I'll fade away
in No one's memory.
An undecipherable stain
in white fiber, purity.

A bothersome spot,
a blight in the rug.
That's what I was,
unsightly.

*More a rant that just happened to rhyme on occasion than a poem.*

It's not the letting go that hurts, it's the holding on.

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

1 posted 2004-09-10 04:54 PM

*wonders if anyone read this one?*

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

2 posted 2004-09-14 09:17 PM

Apparently not, but hey, at least seeing there are replies makes me feel better. And it's perfectly normal for creative people to talk to themselves, and hear voices. Did you know that?

yv
Senior Member

since 2003-05-30

Posts 574

3 posted 2004-11-12 07:03 PM

Pain, sometimes a "rant," as you call it, is the truest form of poetry there is. In fact, there is no sometimes, it simply is. I thought it was truthful and very elegantly written.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

4 posted 2004-11-13 12:17 PM

loved this. It was absolutely brilliant....You have a way with words...

Kissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

5 posted 2004-11-13 01:01 AM

You'll shake your head,
cluck disapproval,
Throw in a gift,
arrange my removal.

awesome dude
so great
u sure do hav a way with words

LOR

your the only one keeping me alive

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

6 posted 2004-11-13 08:17 PM

Thanks, this is one of my favorites.

It's not the letting go that hurts, it's the holding on.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

7 posted 2004-11-13 11:22 PM

So its ok to ask yourself questions and then give answers. That is like being unable to make your mind stop thinking long enough to sit and be comfortable. Feel ya on that one.

-GIS

Doing the same thing a million times in a row will definitely affect your head. Read and pratice and read and pratice and read and prati........ead a

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

8 posted 2004-11-14 12:21 PM

You just had to throw that word purity in there, huh PBC? lol...and in the same poem as the word cluck I might add! (Which, by the way was the perfect word)
I felt this one, and it was an excellent write!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

9 posted 2004-11-14 11:25 AM

Of course, I threw it in there just for you. Glad everybody likes this one. I feel so loved.

It's not the letting go that hurts, it's the holding on.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

10 posted 2004-11-14 06:11 PM

OMG! How did i miss this?! Sorry.

This poem was amazing...me liked it alot!

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

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