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Your Crimson Tears
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Your Crimson Tears |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148
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Your crimson tears leave a trail I can't help but stumble onto along the edge serrated where sharks are known to gather I find you adrift & lifeless & wonder if you'll love me more If I just let you go under |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
oh my! oh my! I LOVED IT that was soooooo amazing there are some very appropriate words that could explain this, but right now, im speechless. SAVED LOR say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean |
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MyCrimsonTears New Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 8 |
i like they word placement, making the poem get smaller as it goes down, nice... oh and i like the name  |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
wow...i am speechless. (for once) lol This was so amazing. I absolutely loved it. You are such an amazing writer...I can really feel everything in this poem. Im definetly saving this. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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PainBaneChaos Member
since 2003-10-17
Posts 150The point of no return |
Probably not. And is it just me, or is it not that the words are just getting smaller, but they look kind of like that serrated knife. love it. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Great to hear from you again K. As always, loved it. Just.....great I guess, but there's more that is unsaid. Hollow. I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"I find you adrift & lifeless & wonder if you'll love me more If I just let you go under" ``````````````````` ive sat here a good few minutes trying to think of what to say..but im just left short of words. damn, thats written "just right" ..its in there and its goooooood |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*grinning* this is awesome . . . |
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brezee Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 140 |
(silence)...hmmm...wicked crazy awesome...I agree with muted in saying that it's written "just right"...I can't think of anything haha you know it's a really awesome poem when people can only reply with one strong word or phrase lol... ~*brezee*~ |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
sorry loved it so much so i just had to reply again this would have to be one of my favourite poems on piptalk ever loved the last phrase, I find you adrift.... till the end. Amazing LOR say wat you will, say what you mean, but you could never offend cuz your dirty words come out clean |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
That's simply..awesome. Loved it. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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vampiana Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 296Nothing and Nowhere |
words can't describe how awesome that poem is. its just...brilliant. i love the name too. "Cut myself on angel's hair and baby's breath"-Kurt Cobain |
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sparrow139 Junior Member
since 2004-05-13
Posts 18UK |
Wow that poem was awesome! I absolutely love it. There is so much said and it is so simply written, yet with so much beneath the surface. ...Wow! |
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