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PainBaneChaos
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since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

0 posted 2004-08-30 10:07 AM

Sometimes I can't breath,
and sometimes I feel breathless.
Sometimes my eyes start to sting,
and a lump grows in my throat.
Sometimes I have to keep myself from running,
walking right out of the room.
Sometimes I have to walk fast,
dodge the killer in the shadows.
Slamming the door in his face.
Just in time.
Sometimes my heart beats too fast,
and sweat beads on my head, for nothing.
Sometimes I want to sleep under the bed,
to prove there's nothing lurking there.
Sometimes I'm screaming,
over and over,
silent,
for someone to look at me.
Really look, and really See.
And help me.
Because sometimes I can't take it.

People like you are the reason people like me need therapy.

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

1 posted 2004-08-30 11:39 AM

And sometimes nither can i. Good poem. I can really realte.

As I look at this world and realize that I am the only one to have seen the end of all Good I let the tears out that and ask the world to see them.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

2 posted 2004-08-31 02:00 AM

Sometimes I want to sleep under the bed,
to prove there's nothing lurking there.

soooo goooood

Sometimes ur poems make me so jealous!

wow. i liked a lot. can relate to so well

Keep on keeping on
LOR

"When i close my eyes, i remember how to smile, under my umbrella im an accomplished exile..."

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

3 posted 2004-08-31 01:46 PM

Actually, there's a secret to me poetry writing. Steven King. That's what I read every night before I start writing, *nod nod* And Ben and Jerry's. That improves everything. It's proven. ^_^

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2004-08-31 03:32 PM

Chaos:

you have perfectly written true anxiety up there . . .

Stephen King - good for you
I have all his novels . . .

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

5 posted 2004-08-31 05:47 PM

King would applaud! And would hand it over to Robert McCammon for the psychology aspects of the horror that is this anxiety. Very well done, indeed!

Lose one friend... Lose all friends... Lose Yourself...

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

6 posted 2004-08-31 06:58 PM

Ahh...steven king...The only man that has every written anything actually "scary" and not just "make u jusmp" scary, "the omg, i'm gonna have nightmares for weeks" kinda scary! ~lol~

Pet Cemetery is my Favorite.

Amazing write...

Karissa

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

brezee
Member

since 2003-06-02

Posts 140

7 posted 2004-08-31 10:03 PM

As always, I just love your writes! This is so anxious-like, I feel that way sometimes also, it's rather odd, haha. Keep reading if it makes ya write! lol. Another awesome job!

~*brezee*~

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

8 posted 2004-09-01 02:36 AM

Wow...good tip, might have to pick up a King novel....hmmmmm....excellent write.

Hollow.

I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad. The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had. - Gary Jules, Mad World.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

9 posted 2004-09-01 05:16 PM

wow....
that was fantastic...
I liked the under the bed part too....

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

10 posted 2004-09-01 07:33 PM

Fellow Stephen King fans! *maniacal laugh* My favorite is The Tommyknockers. Or Maybe Rose Red, even though that's a movie. Or Firestarter... Eh. I am a Stephen King fan. Anyway. Glad people liked the "under the bed" part. I did that. >.< It left a horrible crick in my neck, though, and I kept hitting my head. =.=

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

11 posted 2004-09-01 11:27 PM

Tommyknockers was THE BEST book EVER!! The first time I tried to read it, I just couldn't get into it, then a few years later, I did, and I was sure glad of it.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

12 posted 2004-09-02 02:24 AM

woah

can relate so much.

yeah as LOR sed, i get jealous cus ur such an amazing wirter.
thanx for the tip on King's novels, been to scraed to read them! hahahaha

keep them coming aye.

loveandempathy
darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

PainBaneChaos
Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 150
The point of no return

13 posted 2004-09-02 01:36 PM

SEA: *big wolfy grin* I absolutely loved The Tommyknockers. I just finished a couple days ago. ^_^ I didn't like the ending though. Gard was awesome. *sniffle*
Darkness: Hey, you're an awesome writer too, and so is LOR, so nothing to be jealous about, no? I think my writing has something to do with reading Macbeth in 4th grade and being brought up on horror movies and books like Lord of the Flies. *nod nod* I hated that book, the best people die.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

14 posted 2004-09-07 02:08 PM

I would recommend The Stand
by King, the best epic next to LOTR.

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