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Silent Night |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Christmas 1999 * (Silent night) A homeless woman, ragged sight (Holy night) Sits cold, beneath a city light. (All is calm) Clinks gold in pockets, passing by (All is Bright) But she is poor, and soon will die. (Round yon virgin , mother and child) To hold her close, she has no other (Holy infant so gentle and mild) So she crys, for the arms of her mother. (Sleep in heavenly peace) On this night was Christ the child , (Sleep in heavenly peace) Born to Mary meek and mild (Silent night) Her living pain, relief to send? (Holy Night) Or has he left that task to men? * end |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
The imagery here is fascinating and haunting. This is powerful in pulling emotion to the forefront. You have done well and have given much food for thought. Excellent write.  Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Oh Ford, this made me cry as it is so sad but true how too many struggle simply to live and I only hope they know Jesus lives on and will provide His love to all as He loves all His lambs and always aids to the weak and suffering! (wipes tears) God Bless You, sweet friend, you have a gentle and giving heart that is always glowing, happy holidays, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you But if the bright lights don't receive you You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20 [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-11-2003 03:28 AM).] |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you, icequeen....:-) The word "haunting" in your reply tells me that the poem has worked, perhaps I tried to instill also, a sense of shame in this poem. Having homeless people at all is one of the big shameful things that man is guilty of, especially in a world of such apparent abundance... _________ice ><> |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Noah The situation of the homeless is a crying shame. Please look at the last line of this poem, my own feelings are that the spirit of Jesus is in every man and we are shirking our responsibility to that wonderful spirit by ignoring its urgings, when it is possible to sate them... one of these being to love and take care of each other. I use the figure of Jesus as a metaphor, but am not picking Christianity as the only holder of this type of thought. I believe the feelings I describe here are cosmopolitan and not particular to that religion....As you know, this song is known all over the world...but the lines I have inserted between are seen by very few....I do not believe at all it will have an effect on anyone who has the power to change this situation, but I had an obligation to my muse to write them down. When you read this, please sing the words of the song that separate my lines...then say the poem lines slowly.....you probably have done this, as the spirit of Christ is apparently very close to the surface of your skin.... ______ice ><> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ice...I wrote a series of poems on homelessness called the street. It is indeed a serious issue....especially on cold winter nights. Your poem's song, mixed with the strong imagery makes it very effective. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you , Martie....I would like to see those poems, are they in the archives here? |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you, James.....:-) |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This poem touched me very much. I feel so sorry for the homelss people. The situation is getting worse all the time. Thank you for sharing your feelings with us.  Hugs, Ethel |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice -- Icequeen verbalized my thoughts completely -- ditto Icequeen! Excellent write. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Beautiful write to ponder ice. Chris  |
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