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Open Poetry #30

Snapshots Askew

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2003-12-07 02:00 PM

I could have stayed silent
flexible, compliant
but that just isn't me.

You know that the we
was off kilter, askew
there was way too much you.

So I screamed
and the picture

minus the fixture
of painted on smiles,

rests in the album
of our once in awhile.

How sad that forever
won't photograph well.

WhiteRose 12/07/03

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-12-07 02:08 PM

WhiteRose
A good write, enjoyed the read.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2003-12-07 02:35 PM

"How sad that forever
won't photograph well."

~ how sadly poetic! I love the uniqueness of your writing. You come up with so many memorable lines.

Good to read you again!

eringobraugh
Junior Member

since 2003-12-06

Posts 16
Michigan

3 posted 2003-12-07 08:41 PM

There isn't a single line in this piece that doesn't have a special touch to it. I find your turning of a phrase to be unique to say the least. I really enjoyed this work.

If you would, for my heart,
bring a lone empty chair
Then watch as the Raven
removes it with care

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2003-12-07 09:38 PM

Powerful write, WhiteRose.

"When your life is tossed and turning
And you are on the raging sea I'll come and pull you from the water Then you will know that you are free" - MWS

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-12-10 03:37 AM

I'm here

great piece of work...though sad

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