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The Girl of Cry
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The Girl of Cry |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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The Girl of Cry ©2003 C.G. Ward she rambled on - sighing, crying, bent-back, broke-down in a stiffed-up ripped-up Coupe de Ville …Cad-il-lac Cadillac blackstop ragtop, real in the steel: - prissed up, primped up, bangin’ the wheel-ies while shiften’, griften’, the rich-bitch from Des Moines. the silence heaved as she grieved, angered at a stranger no longer understood. she wept then, deft, clipped to mute, resolute, and killed the phone with a scream, a dream deemed done by the sum of heartache dripping from her eyes – - like ash – and i thought tears should be blue. blue like the sky and water and wind and… …ah, what the hell’s it for anyway? she cried and i wanted nothing more than to comfort, console, parole her pain a moment, two, through the silence of idling engines. oh, the sorrow. but the light turned mean – green, the darkness, red, fed by the fuel of frustration, led by the gruel of temptation. hit the gas – pass on by, then… home, to write ‘bout the Lonely Girl of Cry. Inspiration in the oddest places, the oddest times, producing the oddest... poems?  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
tsk...you need a girl with a Hemi. and dare I ask--I do-- please tell me you laid rubber? (don't swat at an invalid, you!)  good to have you home, whatever the inspiration.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a dream deemed done by the sum of heartache dripping from her eyes – - like ash – and i thought tears should be blue. blue like the sky and water and wind ================= I wish I had wrote those lines!!!!! very cool to see you--to read you again poet sir.  When I'm with you my eyes are so wide ... |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
nice motion potion (I do road poems all the time) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote: Hmmm. I remember feeling that way once when a pouty puppy whined at me. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The flow of this poem was just excellent Christoper, and you have NO idea how good it is to read your work again. quote: Just loved those lines, and the "green,mean" good to see you, Christopher poetry machine! [This message has been edited by Mysteria (12-05-2003 12:17 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
woah nice dude, this is nice! and yea, admittedly different, but thats how a peom should be, you painted the most clear of pictures without being at all cliche and still smooth and stunning. I'm gonna keep this in my library, k? Thanks  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
good stuff as always |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Umm...no demolition crew for this poem. I think this one is best kept near the top for as long as I can keep it there. Sounds like the changing of dream scenes and more. There are always so many layers to your work I can't count....or am I reaching to deep? **Hugs** good to see you All of my impurities are right here on my sleeve. This is Me"---Faith Hill |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you've been missed |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
but the light turned mean – green, the darkness, red, fed by the fuel of frustration, led by the gruel of temptation. hit the gas – pass on by, then… home, to write ‘bout the Lonely Girl of Cry. Hello Christopher! I sure did like this poem. It's good to see you here. Hope to see more of you.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this rocks! i loved the realistic picture you created in our minds... very vivid and powerful! this one is a keeper for sure! take care. amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Liked this alot |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Unusual but definitely YOU. Wherever you get inspiration is fine as long as we get to see the results. Missed you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Christopher...I loved the flow and the internal rhythm and rhyme...seemed so well thought out, yet effortless...a great road story! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Its amazing where you can find inspiration...and much more amazing when it comes out like this...great write Chris |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Good to read you again Golden Voice... *hugs* ~Tier |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Christopher, I loved the beat of this, it has its own metric life. Loved these lines in particular: she cried and i wanted nothing more than to comfort, console, parole her pain a moment, two, through the silence of idling engines. and the "mean - green" perfecto! Corinne |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Christopher, I find that I can read your work over and over and find a different twist or turn each time. Awesome. Chris "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh my, you are so good at this! Sadly beautiful it is. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
thanks all - i appreciate your support of my quasi-random attempts at humor and madness (or madness and humor... i forget which comes third). hugs 'round. C |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"the silence heaved as she grieved, angered at a stranger no longer understood." "hit the gas – pass on by, then… home, to write ‘bout the Lonely Girl of Cry." Hey C...Sorry to be so long in getting here. I was actually here before, just after you posted, but was either trying to wake up or trying to get sleepy and just read without replying. Anyway, love the Cadillac images. I had an old Sedan de Ville in college and that verse brought back a few fun memories. As always (though too rarely these days) damn fine writing. Inspirational and intimidating at the same time. Good to read ya again C. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
blue like the sky and water and wind and… …ah, what the hell’s it for anyway? she cried and i wanted nothing more than to comfort, console, parole her pain a moment, two, through the silence of idling engines.'''' what a vividly sad image..... good to see you Lauren~ I would rather have one breath of his hair, |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I knew before I read this that it would be perfect, yours usually is Love the flow and go of it, the clickety-clack feeling and then the revving up of it and the girl of cry would be honored had she known she inspired such a brilliant write. Good to see your work again, dear. Caroline the only man worth your tears will never make you cry |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Odd? then I be odd sir, for I understood this one, and sat amazed that it was written by a guy... |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Well done!!!!! I really loved the flow of this poem. Nice job! It was uneaque and that is awesome! It really tyouched something. |
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