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Raspberries...A Ghazal
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Raspberries...A Ghazal |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Suddenly even the dusty blinds and tangled cords pause when punishing me with your words tumbling into my heart in tacit breaths. Swallowed like frozen pureed blueberries, stunned into chilled hurt, drinking your last days you spoke to me. Colors fade but not your lips. I bravely call you by name, remembering the raspberries you loathed yet painted your desert sky the taste of my kiss, blushed red. You prowled the damp, dark alleys when the early Spring winds tickled your weary, battle scarred scents exuding the vibrant hush of a killer. I forgot your favorite color as my blood streaked your teeth as you slaughter me slowly, playing my wounded hobble, pouncing on tender flesh. Now you sleep, tropical fruits lay at your feet. Slipping out into the reddish dawn, I carry the raspberries like scar tissue after a season of drunk. We have to shake this tired clown dance, dreaming where the lines cross and you slip into your persona of happy face while smearing your melancholy on your pillow. Even with insects- |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Jesse, this sounds so sad, dearest friend, I hope all is alright as you certainly can tell when ones days ain't raspberry wine by the blueberry stained wrinkles under ones eye as if they feel they have to say the deepest goodbye! (sigh) This is wonderfully heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jesse, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you Noah, no, I am a happy camper actually...I just love Raspberries. And this is just a poem that I love exploring things. Written to a poet I still enjoy. Sparticus. Even with insects- |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Exploration? It was really well done...a lot of feeling in it.  ~sky Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
keep exploring...I'll keep learning from you |
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ihavetea New Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 3 |
i really liked this! |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you sky, shadows and tea. I very much appreciate your kind words. And a special welcome to my good friend, Ihavetea. Always a delight to talk to you. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Very strong imagery. Thank you for sharing it. I always thought "Raspberries" was a good title for a book.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, I love raspberries too, but they rarely give me nightmares. |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you Ice and Midnight...I am happy you enjoyed. And Raspberries are just plain good. I want that with my smoothie! Hmmm, book title... Sparticus Even with insects- |
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