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comforting the thorn |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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perfection in the loam she grew finding strength in solitude as above she grew below the sun was just a dark shadow of negatives reversed she knew that light was dark and dark was home. simple budding petals cleave a bullet made of purity mighty like the rose on grave--I cut her hoping I am saved as I render sacrifice I honored one and ended life knowing she would give array-- as petals fall by ones away- comforting the thorn. say to me that I am saved tell me I have purity watching a full rose in bloom dropping velvet one by one wilting in the crush of bruise fingering the need of muse lust the waft of loving death-- touching...irresistible. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-30-2003 04:32 AM).] |
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ihavetea New Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 3 |
this is so well done. great read. [This message has been edited by ihavetea (11-30-2003 08:59 AM).] |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
watching a full rose in bloom dropping velvet one by one wilting in the crush of bruise fingering the need of muse lust the waft of loving death-- ...and your cup runniest over with talent. Real nice, poe If nothing is something |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"simple budding petals cleave a bullet made of purity mighty like the rose on grave--I cut her hoping I am saved as I render sacrifice I honored one and ended life knowing she would give array-- as petals fall by ones away- comforting the thorn." Amazing as always Karen. I SOOO wish I'd thought of that line...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, say to me that I am saved tell me I have purity watching a full rose in bloom dropping velvet one by one wilting in the crush of bruise fingering the need of muse lust the waft of loving death-- touching...irresistible. I think that about says it all. |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
Very nice! Love, Terri~  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Karen...this one called to me from this sea of blue. And I know why. You see, I have been working on something in my mind, and well, I think it will flow onto the paper now. Thanks for the lovely read and the inspiration to pick up my pen. Patricia |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
As above So, below Hugs m'witch |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
light was dark and dark was home. love you Karen xxoo |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen...You are so very lovely! |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, I'm sitting here with my mouth open in awe. You are amazing, my friend.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
good piece i liked it We do away with your kind...I am war I am pain I am all you've ever slein I am tears in your eyes I am truth I am lies. Dimmu Borgir |
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C_ROK06 Junior Member
since 2003-10-23
Posts 49 |
all i can say is... wow. its so wonderfull, inspireing, and deep.. so encredibly moving... loved it. just loved it. thanx for sharing it with us. "So let us then try to climb the mountain,not by stepping on what is below us,but to pull us up at what is above us,for my part at the stars"-MCE |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
and dark was home...Awesome writing Karen. Jason |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you all (and once again, special hugs to Martie, as she helped to clarify this one for me.)  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful, inside and out...like the one who wrote it. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I dig strength. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) And you always bring comfort to both values as your words truly heal, feel, and act as both doctor and philanthropist to every poets heart! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Totally awesome poem. Don't know how I missed this earlier. If I had to comment on each line that I liked, I would have to repost the entire work! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful work, lady! *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ooohh Karen... noddin my head and still wonderin how you do this.... you are so beautiful lady.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
she knew that light was dark and dark was home. simple budding petals cleave a bullet made of purity mighty like the rose on grave--I cut her hoping I am saved as I render sacrifice I honored one and ended life knowing she would give array-- as petals fall by ones away- comforting the thorn. say to me that I am saved tell me I have purity watching a full rose in bloom dropping velvet one by one wilting in the crush of bruise fingering the need of muse lust the waft of loving death-- touching...irresistible. ==================================== can a very tardy moth get in on this?  what you do with haunting images and assonance leaves me moth giddy... classic Sen poetry..each one a turn of page, as your poetic vision reaches to keep up with your gifted pen. this is a keeper me twin. When I'm with you my eyes are so wide ... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
exhaleeeeeeee... shaking head.... silent so silent |
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Chrissysue Junior Member
since 2003-11-21
Posts 23Nebraska |
A very wonderful read for me. I've been struggling with my faith for some time now. I've been a pagan for many years but have had a hard time practicing as of late. Your words spoke to me and filled my heart with a feeling I can't rightly describe. Thank you so very much. Goddess Bless, |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"say to me that I am saved tell me I have purity watching a full rose in bloom dropping velvet one by one wilting in the crush of bruise fingering the need of muse lust the waft of loving death-- touching...irresistible." ~ I know this is to be metaphorical, yet I couldn't help thinking about my own rose bushes. This last stanza was my favorite part. Enjoyed! |
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