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Talking Crazy to the Wind
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Talking Crazy to the Wind |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Talking Crazy to the Wind Brush my hair I am wild In a room without walls words banter about and want to save me A claw tears the fabric rends and strips the chimes then tosses out this rhyme Gather leaves around the garden hose like a mother her format calls for clinging I can lie down like a snake too and be a magnet to flying things like purple an idea is folded by my eyes then put away until this empty space is climbing past me And there is no where to stop you see there is only up and me I am just a traveler looking for a home, finding I carry it around with me, and sometimes it's just too heavy. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can lie down like a snake too and be a magnet to flying things like purple an idea is folded by my eyes then put away until this empty space is climbing past me ~*~ Now, you know how I feel about "up"... and you know how I feel about  s |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Your words are quality Fabric is only ripped when a surface covering comes into contact with something it wasn't designed to do Would you deny entrance to the uncouth who are already attacking people who write as I saw tonight A cosy closed locked loop system that invited me in knowing what I was and what I belived in Piptalk gives a chance to write It is like a blind being given eyes Your words Your ideas Your passions and emotions Are the world's ideas For a perfect moment Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"And there is no where to stop you see there is only up and me" Wonderful sweet Martie... I so much enjoy your style. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Everytime I read you I think "my new favorite"--you are consistently amazing lady.  |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
If I had to pick one stanza as my fav, this would be it> "Gather leaves around the garden hose like a mother her format calls for clinging" But please don't make me chose, I love them all...:-) enjoyed _______ice ><> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I don't have words for this, my reactions were physical not intellectual. Very interesting!!! *smile* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martie you are special. Love, Margherita  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I can lie down like a snake too and be a magnet to flying things What an image! What a poet! it's definitely a M Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh...i do like the syle of this...sooo much |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This a bit jumbled love...first five lines are great and then it seems to lose it a bit... it just goes off into happy lala poetry land heh...doesn't say much though? Unfortunately, extended metaphor can do that...belabour the point until it's all image and little communicated meaning... hugs  K |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes Martie...yes and more...such is the wind and all it's wiles... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I enjoyed the read... and what an interesting title! I've done that a lot of times in moments of distress but I wasn't talking... more shouting I'm afraid! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, you always fly on gossamer wings with your poetry and show us all what up is, sweet friend, up and away beyond the emptiness we go, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Martie, I know the source of this and I have been to that place though I am incapable of relating it as poetry in the way that you do so beautifully here....and while I cannot fly I can be there. You on the other hand do fly effortlessly from time to time, as I have told you on more than one occasion.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a perfect ending |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
"I can lie down like a snake too and be a magnet to flying things" Love this, Martie... you never cease to amaze me, my friend... Love you...miss you...  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The wind always has something to say doesn't it? I wonder where it takes our words? Maybe we need a net. I'm reminded of those mammals who batten down the tall grass for a bed (and love the hose/snake gathering analogy) An unexpected upbeat ending. I enjoyed. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Talking crazy... like a fox... Martie, you have the innocence of a child, and true soul of a poet. If there is one truth in life, that would have to be, that you’ll never cease to amaze me. Oh, and I hope you don’t mind me saying, but your new picture is simply beautiful! Richy |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I can lie down like a snake too" I liked that line...well, the entire piece...but in particular that line "sit on top of the world and tell me how you feel...'cause what you feel is what I feel for you.." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - this is terrific and I loved it - Paul |
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