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rainydaymusic
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0 posted 2004-01-22 10:00 PM



I don't know.  I wrote this weeks ago, fixed it a few times, still can't tell if I like it.


COULD BE

Well it sounds true. mine.  You are,
as I refer to you. you are,
mine.
We both know, well, you know,
and maybe, as I do,
on my worser days,
on these badder days -
bad grammar days,
I say things,
I mean not to.
But it sounds true!
You could be, mine.
Well, could be,
if you tried.

"blue lights shining over my life"

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muted
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1 posted 2004-01-22 10:26 PM


this is really cute, like a shy little plea...

has me smilin'

Justbleu
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2 posted 2004-01-22 11:25 PM


I really enjoyed this!!!
It's cool!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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